Poetry.

[chameleon_luna]

This is from the poetry memoir I'm working on, critique is greatly appreciated and encouraged.

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Morning

my eyes are open, but i’m not sure why.

the room is dark, windows allowing the tiniest scrap of light in,

and that sadistic red glow of numbers across the room says

it’s 5:30.

then i remember

why I’m awake

why the room is dark

Comments

[saphira_314]

You take my breath away. Don't look for critisism from anyone. You won't get it. These are brilliant.

[babe_81189]

Well I think they suck....*dramatic pause* just kidding these are great. i like them a ton. kepp it up and i'm sure the book wil be great.