comments on the story below

[chameleonwizard]

Looking for criticisms. If anyone can help, please comment. Any assistance in developing my style and story telling abilities is greatly appreciated. Grammar corrections obviously will help as well

Comments

YESH!!!

[anonymous]

I think that Lucy sounds like a big strong GREAT character, whoever you based her off of must be really really HOT!!!!

And Dillon, he ROCKS out with his C-O-C-K out!
Great story telling!!!
And the screaming PUG, how do you come up with this crazy stuff, brilliant, genius, I would definetly FUCK the hell out of you Chameleon Wizard.

Re: YESH!!!

[chameleonwizard]

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA