Fic: Erythrocytes and Daydreams

[charmed8620]

A final fic for the bsg_epics charity drive.

Title: Erythrocytes and Daydreams
Summary: Mid-Season 2, Laura ponders the implications of her 'cure'.
Pairing: Adama/Roslin
Rating: MA
Word Count: 9,648
A/N: This is simultaneously my first attempt at writing A/R and at writing anything MA, so let me know your thoughts, and if you see something I could do to improve

Comments

[larsfarm77]

This was wonderful. I really felt that the show dropped the ball when it came to Laura's cure -- how she felt about it, what implications it would have for the Fleet -- and I love that you've faced these issues in this story.

What would you have told me about your impressions of Sharon Valerii if I’d asked you in the first couple months after the attacks? I’ll tell you what…you’d have told me she was a kind, brave, and caring person and you’d have sworn that she couldn’t be like any of the cylons we’d met.”

Such a great idea, and I love how patient Bill is with everything, slowly disarming her, and making her feel better. The rapport between them is beautiful and tangible and that carries right through the sex, which was sweet and hot and very 'them'.

An amazing first crack at A/R, and I love that they're the first ones that you went MA with --beautifully done!

[charmed8620]

Thank you, thank you!! It means so much to hear that you liked my first A/R story (especially coming from a writer who's Laura stories were some of the first that I read and really loved). I agree that the show dropped the ball with her cure, I'd have loved to chance to see Mary's portrayal of the emotions surrounding it, but alas I'll have to settle for fandom stories. Really though, thank you so much for taking the time to comment, it not only makes my day but it gives me the confidence to want to go out and do more A/R writing :D

[charmed8620]

Thank you! I'm so happy you liked the story and that you felt it fit their relationship :)

it somehow felt like this sudden shift, and something that had been building for so long, all at once...I'd never have thought to describe it this way, but I think you've just captured kind of how I feel about their relationship as a whole in that one sentence.

I'm glad you enjoyed my run-on sentence of Bill's opinions, hehe, it does seem like a very Bill thing to do to simply list the facts and use them to make his point. I saw that you've posted a couple chapters of a new fic for the charity drive as well, and I'm looking forward to reading them! (Just as soon as I finish my work that's due Thursday that I put off in order to complete this fic in time).

[afrakaday]

Wow! You hit it out of the park with this thoughtful, sexy, and satisfying take on A/R. :D
I just love their dialogue (seriously, this is your first A/ R fic? O.o) and the ending is so sweet and funny with Billy finding them. My hat is off to you!

[charmed8620]

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it (especially since you helped me feel motivated to write it in the first place)!!

[afrakaday]

I'm happy to cheerlead any time! I really hope you write more A/R!

[fragrantwoods]

This was mesmerizing! You brought her internal fears and struggles out so clearly with her processing of her paper cut--that was so artistic and beautiful (never thought I'd say that about a paper cut!) That became such a great metaphor for this new way of being alive she's trying to figure out.

She gets so honest with herself and with Bill, but you show that it doesn't come easy, either. And I loved one of her "symptoms" being really missing the little things about home (her heel collection made me LOL). What I'm trying to say (poorly) is that this is an incredibly *alive* Laura and I liked her a lot.

Then Bill, being the great friend, comrade in arms, healer, and lover with a good sense of humor--that was perfect. You have him be so logical, but he doesn't immediately make it all better--I love that he is willing to validate her fears while he's moving to comfort her (among other things). I can't believe you haven't been writing A/R for years--you have a terrific sensibility about them. I hope you write more!

[charmed8620]

Wow this is such a lovely comment, thank you! I can't believe you haven't been writing A/R for years--you have a terrific sensibility about them. I hope you write more! It's definitely comments like these that make me want to forget all about catching up on work and just immediately start on my next fic ;)

And yes, I fully believe Laura had a great lingerie and shoe collection on Caprica, hehe, so I'm glad it made you laugh.

[nixmom]

Running behind, but here I am now. Well...I do believe that fulfilled the kiss request!

I like Laura having the nondescript differences and her attributing them to the Cylon transfusion.

And Bill uses all of his tricks, logic, humor, sex, to help calm her fears. Well done for a first stab at A/R.!!

[charmed8620]

Thanks for reading!! I'm happy to know you liked my first attempt at A/R and hopefully I'll be writing some more soon :)