OC Fic: The Hart Break

[chaseii]

Title:  The Hart Break

Chapter  5  (Part 1 of 3)

Author:  ChaseII

Story Rating: PG-13(?) (minor language)

Disclaimer: The OC Universe, with all its assorted characters, belongs to Josh Schwartz, et. al. No copyright or trademark infringement is intended, nor is any money being made.

A/N:  Mostly Unbeta'd -- all mistakes are mine, mine, mine...

Comments

[slinn01]

was thinking about this fic the other day. i really like it and i'm glad there is an update! thanks!

[chaseii]

You're welcome. Thank you!

That was a great start for chapter five !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[thekiller00]

I am glad that Ryan has become some what comfortable about talking with Kirsten !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I can't wait to see what happens in the rest of chapter five !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Re: That was a great start for chapter five !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[chaseii]

Kirsten and Ryan were always a little uneasy around one another, weren't they?

[selin_74]

Love this!!!

[chaseii]

Thank you!

[chazper]

This is wonderful, chaseii. I'm going to save my full comments until I read all three parts, but I do have to cite my two favorite lines out of many evocative ones in this section:

Ryan’s words are like the tips of icebergs - so much of what he says lies buried deep beneath their surface. That describes exactly how Ryan communicates, and I do so love the image.

“Thanks,” he says softly, before taking a long sip. His eyes reflect more layers to the word. Again, Ryan's wordless way of expressing himself, conveyed so beautifully in your prose, just as Ben conveyed it on screen.

[chaseii]

I was always captured by how much BMcK was able to 'say' without saying anything. I'm not sure whether the character of Ryan would have been so compelling with another actor -- Ben gave him so much depth with so little material to work with.

Thank you for reviewing. As always, I am grateful for the time you give my stories.

[fredsmith518]

It’s uncomfortable thinking of their home in terms of ‘Ryan space’ and ‘Cohen space’, but she has to admit she does. He does, too, she’s sure. She thinks of times he’s entered their house like a guest unsure of welcome, and closes her eyes.

well put, I very much like Ryan's honesty later that he did prefer the pool house, but Kirsten still acknowledges that's not the point - they should have checked.

I know you have issues with canon Kirsten - you protray Kirsten all her doubts, insecurities and struggles to get over them so, so well
Lovely protrayal of Ryan too.

[chaseii]

Thank you for your kind words -- I know you and I have a soft spot for Kirsten/Ryan. You're right about my issues with canon Kirsten -- she simply breaks my heart.

I'm just glad we have flisters who write her like I think she was intended to be written on the show (but wasn't). Fanfic Kirsten is amazing -- in your hands, and in the hands of many of our flisters, she is the mother Ryan deserves to have.