Best Forgotten, a Fic for Brandy, Pt. 14

[chazper]

Getting this in just under the wire (meaning the end of the month.) I've actually written about 1,000 words more of this story, but that part isn't finished, so I decided just to incorporate it in the next (final? No, probably not) chapter. So, for now, here is part 14

Comments

[beachtree]

Looks like LJ is back from the fix-it. It also looks like Ryan and the Cohens are at the point where the toll has become physical, right down to the degrees of reaction. In Ryan's case, it's a pretty unfathomable emotional and psychological price exacted on top of the physical. He's been pushed to the brink when he hears Dr. Killer's repeated insensitive comment after the inhuman, deceitful, cruel and inhumane ways he treated and displayed Ryan

[chazper]

Tick-tock indeed, beach! I'm feeling the pressure myself now. And look what you've done! I'd forgotten abut Social Services--as neglectful as they tended to be on the show, they certainly couldn't ignore this little incident.

[beachtree]

Nope. Social Services couldn't ignore this- not even in canon! Then again, if they'd been even remotely more of a presence (meaning they'd existed), and made even one visit to witness, say the oh-so-awkward Ryan/Kirsten dynamic in action, or, God forbid, come with Caleb on the scene, what would they make of... this? Ouch! Ryan sets the record for "worst placement ever." Who knew Dawn and A.J. could ever look so good?!

[fredsmith518]

Really liked your protrayal of Kirsten's epiphany, the wavering in the middle, these things are never clearcut with loved ones, even in the face of overwhelming evidence, it's hard to believe

Their razor-sharp eyes studied him, probing, but Ryan knew they never really saw him. They saw some kind of specimen all too true for lots of professionals

the end section really caught Ryan's despair, shudders, liked the refer back to the pool nightmare, most apt

(doesn't read like melodrama! mystery, adventure, nods)

[chazper]

(doesn't read like melodrama! mystery, adventure, nods)

Aw, thanks, fred! I'm really pleased to hear that. I'm also happy that the depiction of Kirsten rang true for you hear. Her emotions have gotten so complicated at this point that I wasn't sure I had done them justice.

[jujuberry136]

Yay Kristen for getting on board, but what a terrible realization about your father. I hope she can keep it together long enough to help Ryan. I'm so worried! It seems like there are so many factors against Ryan right now, most of all timing. I'm keeping my fingers crossed that Caleb decides he needs to gloat/monologue to give the Cohens time to get to the clinic.

Thanks for sharing!

[chazper]

You're welcome!

there are so many factors against Ryan right now

I guess there are. Well, we'll se, we'll see . . . :)

[alluxera]

Yesterday I went happy to bed, because I knew a new chapter was waiting for me and you didn't disappoint. Thank you!
Poor Ryan, my heart is clenching for him and I want to shout out to the Cohen's:" HURRY DAMNED!"

[chazper]

I'm glad you found this worth the wait! And the Cohens are trying to hurry, honest. (I am too!)

[zbyszko]

Love the new chapter. Poor Ryan is going to need some really good therapy if you let him survive Caleb and the evil Dr. Keller.

"But if I'm going to write melodrama, I might as well go all the way, yes?"
So this better mean that Caleb gets his come-uppance as all villains should. : )

[chazper]

What, you don't think Ryan will just say "Whew! Glad that's over" and settle in for some videogames with Seth? And you don't think a stern "Shame on you, Dad" from Kirsten will be enough punishment for Caleb?

No? Then I may have to rethink my entire ending for this story!

[jassylou]

Still hope the evil Caleb has an accident on the boarding ramp.

I'd like to here the snap!!! of his neck.It would be after they found Ryan of course.*evil cackle*.

It's a great fic chazper sorry for the late.'VERY' late comment.

Is excited!!!