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chazper

Best Forgotten, Part 29. Still not "The End", but nearly

Jul 31, 2011 18:53

have most of the last part of this story written, but I couldn't quite finish it and, well, it is the end of the month. So for those few die-hards still reading, here's the next part of "Best Forgotten."

Say it with me now: season 1 AU, not mine, except the clinic-related characters.

Best Forgotten, Part 29
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Comments 15

zbyszko August 1 2011, 02:24:31 UTC

Yay for Sandy punching Grady. And Caleb getting kicked out of the family. Thanks for the update!

chazper August 1 2011, 19:48:16 UTC

You're welcome. By the way, I did enjoy writing those bits. :)

beachtree August 1 2011, 04:11:30 UTC

This will be rushed, but it's no reflection on your writing. Swear on Dawn! I'm in the process of switching 'puters prior to an imminent demise, so it's borrowed time... time ( ... )

chazper August 1 2011, 19:52:37 UTC

This was a rushed comment? This was wonderful! I'm so flattered that you took the time for this feedback, and especially all your praise for my imagery. Thanks so much, beach.

I hope your computer switch goes smoothly. I'm about to do that myself. (*fingers crossed for both of us!*)

beachtree August 1 2011, 21:16:29 UTC

Oh, yeah. I'm ashamed to admit how rushed it was, but I hope it didn't diminish my attempt to convey how much I enjoyed it and tried to keep my eyes pried open to appreciate all the wonderful images that you sketched so vividly and poignantly when it came to Ryan and Lucy. Despite the type and tone of the story, you've managed to incorporate a "tree growing in Brooklyn,"- or some bizarre part of Cozumel!

Best of luck with your 'puter migration and transition. Even with the latest and greatest technology, I'm finding many hurdles I hope that you're spared with out-of-the-box defects, bloatware, faulty drives, etc., I'm ready for an Etch-A-Sketch. Crossing appendages!

60schic August 1 2011, 14:04:48 UTC

Oh...OH...OH !!!!!

Heart is all a pitter-patter, breath short and shallow. Am excited, I am. So close...so very cose now.

chazper August 1 2011, 19:54:58 UTC

So glad you enjoyed this, Chic. And I actually have almost 2000 words of the next chapter written! Who knows--it might not take a full month to post!

60schic August 1 2011, 20:14:20 UTC

Best thing I've heard all day!

fredsmith518 August 1 2011, 15:25:29 UTC

that was painful, I didn't peep, but so much wanted the Cohens to reach Ryan, phew!

I liked the change of pace, from Lucy's frantic pace, to relief with Felix to the incredibly well written Cohens v Caleb section, I especially like the deconstruction of Kirsten and Caleb's relationship, the way you write their words vibrates off the page, pictures singing in the air, words resounding

He seemed to deflate, bit by bit, with each labored word. His skin grew flaccid, and even the sharp lines of his face seemed to blur. very clear on several levels, physical, mental and soul deep

very real, I think that Sandy would hesitate, putting his own need to see Ryan on the back burner to check that Ryan was safe from further harm

I'm glad that you haven't finished this!

fredsmith518 August 1 2011, 15:27:15 UTC

and I loved that the sound of his name was bringing Ryan back, and that was apparent before the reveal - well done!

chazper August 1 2011, 19:59:13 UTC

His name mattered so much in this story--I had to make it the sound that would summon him back. But I love that you noticed.

chazper August 1 2011, 19:57:22 UTC

he way you write their words vibrates off the page, pictures singing in the air, words resounding

Oh my gosh, fred, such high praise! You make me feel absolutely wonderful. Thank you, thank you, thank you.

alluxera August 2 2011, 19:49:22 UTC

Aren't you sad it is over now....soon? I'm sure I am.

Thank you for your regularly updates, it was something looking forward to at the end of the month. I will miss it.

chazper August 3 2011, 13:08:40 UTC

I confess, I may miss writing this too, but with 30 chapters, it's already so, so, so much longer than I ever planned. And who knows? Even though I think this marks the end of my OC fic writing (except for finishing "Blood Ties"--I have to do that), I'm so used to unwinding this way that I may produce an occasional story or two. All at the end of the month of course!

Thanks so much for reading!

alluxera August 3 2011, 15:45:20 UTC

That would be great, your very own 'end-of-the-month-challenge'. I'm sure many readers would be greatful for that and I'm sure there are many more themes for you to discover.