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The Real LJ Idol - Mini-Season - Week 13
This is my entry for Week 13 of LJ Idol (

Comments

[murielle]

This is pure poetry. Your use of language is luxurious, elegant, and yet simple--seemingly obvious. You make your protagonist's pain and sorrow tangible.

Plus, this old BtVS fan gives you mega brownies for using the word "effulgence."

[cheapxdate]

Thank you so much. This is such a huge compliment. I am often a very dialogue heavy writer, but every now and then I get inspired to write a piece like this. Of course, because it's a rarity, I'm never sure how it will turn out (and it's not like I left myself very much time to write something else before the deadline <.< lol). So, again, thank you. :)

I've noticed recently (especially since I'm not reading much these days) that I've pretty much stopped introducing new words into my vocabulary and fall back on the same descriptors over and over again. So, every week, I try to work in 3-5 new words into my writing. Of course, I worry that they won't quite fit or will seem forced if my perceived definition isn't quite right, so YAY EFFULGENCE! lol

[murielle]

You know, I can totally relate to that. I find dialogue quite easy to write, so from time to time I try to avoid it, and see where that takes me.

You did this brilliantly.

[sinnamongirl]

Oh, this is so poignant and heartfelt and sad and pretty at the same time.

[favoritebean]

This is lovely, and ever so heartbreaking to read. The music accompanying it is also quite nice.

[alycewilson]

Your piece captures both the sunlight and the abrupt ending of that piece of music. I wonder how many times this sort of situation takes place in countries where arranged marriages are common.

[tonithegreat]

This is a very vivid vignette. I feel for the protagonist.