[Fic] I Don't Wanna Die

[chedarr]

Title: I Don't Wanna Die
Author:
Characters: America, England, and Canada [minor appearances from other nations]
Rating: M
Warning: psychotic!America, character death, and England not paying attention to his surroundings
Summary: America has been given 12 hours to make a decision. Between him and England, America has to make the choice on which one has

Comments

[fmavatard]

...well crap. There's goes my good night's sleep.

But I loved it. Loved loved loved it. Terrifying, especially since we never find out just WHO'S behind this.

[chedarr]

SLEEP IS FOR THE WEAK!

Ok, scaring people out of a good night's sleep wasn't really my true intentions, but I can't really help that at all, lol

And thank you! Glad you enjoyed it! c:

[lurking_pie]

...this story still creeps me out.

I love it, but it scares me.

[chedarr]

UWAH WHAT ARE YOU DOING HERE

Also glad you like it but still
WHAT ARE YOU DOING HERE

[trimacle]

Well that was creepy.
Haha, for a second I was sorta relieved that Canada took down America but then I read the ending.
I wonder if any of the Nations are noble enough to sacrifice themselves. Probably not

[chedarr]

Hehe, why thank you. c:

Honestly, I only see like very few nations doing something like that to themselves...they'd pretty much have to be dying or something to not actually...mind. xD

[kamikazemusume]

I got some very Battle Royale-ish vibes from this fic - the ultimatum of having to decide whether to kill a close friend or be killed yourself, a seemingly cheery character snapping like a twig, the collar (unless you meant his shirt collar when describing where the camera was), the intense adrenaline rush while reading it or maybe that's just me...

I like. I like a lot. ♥

I would love to see a continuation of this someday, and I look forward to more of your psychotic!America. And more of your writing in general - I quite like your style.

[chedarr]

Yoooooooou. For some unknown reason I wanted you to read this, lol xD

Honestly, this has been hinted at me before, but since I made Canada next, I dunno who his target should be since I know NO French and then there's England who just had this problem ahahahaha I want to. I just dunno what to doooo. xD
psychotic!America makes the world go round

And thank you, glad you like it!

[kamikazemusume]

LOL, really? Might it have something to do with the fic recommendations I made recently? xD

Shooting off a not-so-random list of ideas for Canada's target:
- Nations that have very friendly relations with Canada either historically or canonically: Cuba, Ukraine OH THE INTERNAL CONFLICT
- Nations that Canada may historically have a reason to fight/kill (since canonically, I can't really think of any): Germany, Russia

As far as the language issue goes... there are a couple of different ways to deal with that which don't require you gaining fluency in any other language, and from my observation, the most widely accepted is to to simply note when a character switches to a different language (e.g. "The rain in Spain," Canada began the lyric in English, then finished in French, "falls mainly on the plain."). It does depend a bit on context and point of view, though, whether you should make a note of that. Hopefully that helps a little.

[chedarr]

Quite possibly. xD

This is probably why I can easily do a story involving America and England more because of the whole English language I need to stop that >:

...but I still should learn other languages.

[chiisana00]

Psychotic!America does have its own charm, though I hope in your future fics, you would be able to make it more convincing.

I'm sorry that you received critique from me, while they're always around in midst of all the nice praises. I'm going to keep it short to avoid long comment;

-Characterization is not the best in this fic.
-The plot/reason is not good or convincing enough.
-You could've gone deeper into it in many ways to make this fic much better (and at the same time, much longer too).

At the very last, I do enjoy survival game/plots. So I'll be looking forward to your future fics. However, a beta would be nice if you wish to improve :)

Cheers and good luck!

[chedarr]

It's fine, I don't mind seeing critique in here. I actually prefer it since I know I'm not that much of a writer. c:

And thank you for the words!
I'll have to look into find a beta though, just not sure where to start...

Thanks again! I appreciate it!