Comments | cheesy_love: What a Beautiful Feeling

holly96 in cheesy_love

What a Beautiful Feeling

Apr 30, 2006 20:17

Title: What a Beautiful Feeling ( Read more... )

Comments 16

eolivet May 1 2006, 16:38:46 UTC

Ooh, this is really well-done -- from the excellent description at the beginning to the extremely realistic and emotional convo at the end -- I really enjoyed the progression of this story. Great idea, beautifully executed -- keeeep writing!!! :D

holly96 May 1 2006, 22:04:19 UTC

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was worried that I rushed the conversation at the end a bit, and even this morning realized that I forgot a line I had wanted to include. But oh well, it wasn't critical.

havemy_heart May 1 2006, 18:56:13 UTC

I think you should be proud of this. It was beautiful. I was really afraid that Veronica *had* died in the past and Logan was just torturing himself by remembering that day. I breathed a huge sigh of relief that Veronica was alive, and I'm glad that she made Logan tell her exactly what he was thinking.

Logan feels like he can finally start letting go of the past and just love her. And what a beautiful feeling it is.

Gorgeous!

holly96 May 1 2006, 22:42:53 UTC

Thanks for the feedback, I'm glad you liked it!

I was really afraid that Veronica *had* died in the past and Logan was just torturing himself by remembering that day.
Well, that was my goal, to get people to think at least for moment that she had died. So I'm glad it worked, at least a little bit.

sinca May 1 2006, 19:24:52 UTC

Holly! I didn't know you wrote a fic!! This is just great. Nice idea, and the way you wrote it was so good. I like how you're not quite sure who pulls Logan out of his reverie even though as the reader you're hoping it is Veronica. That's good stuff.

Yay for you!

holly96 May 1 2006, 22:46:46 UTC

Aww, thanks! This is actually not the first I've written, but the first I've finished and posted. But I'm going to try to get to the others one of these days (one is already 12,000 words!)

I like how you're not quite sure who pulls Logan out of his reverie even though as the reader you're hoping it is Veronica.
That's what I was going for, but I wasn't sure how long it would work. I purposely didn't use her name until she mentions her "tragic death," but I'm pretty sure people would have figured it out before that. But even a moment of being not sure is awesome!

Thanks for the feeback!

sitebuilderchic May 1 2006, 22:55:58 UTC

this was... beautiful. theres just no other word to describe this. great job!

holly96 May 1 2006, 23:21:24 UTC

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

cloud_forest May 2 2006, 01:58:19 UTC

Wow. Wow, wow, wow. This fic just grabbed hold of my heart and wouldn't let go until the very end. Even now I'm still feeling the after-shocks of such powerful writing. I really, really loved this.

I'm so glad you let Veronica live. The moments from the past were just so tragic for Logan, and you made me feel it...

*is blown away*

Awesome stuff.

holly96 May 2 2006, 07:46:03 UTC

Wow, I'm flattered. Thanks so much for the kind feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed it!