Knock On Wood

[chenstummy]

Title: Knock On Wood
Author: chenstummy
Pairing: Kaisoo
Word Count: 3,739
Rating: PG-13
Prompt: picture

Comments

[swabluu]

sobs this is really pretty and well written and beautiful and the imagery is gorgeous and your writing is gorgeous and jasdkfljasjflasjdfljasfdj;asfasfj cries ;;

thank you for writing this <3

[chenstummy]

ajfai;sdjgdsi;ogjerh;itnj;dfl thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment ; u ; it really means a lot, especially from such a wonderful writer!! /goes off to read more of your fics

[swabluu]

aldfjasfjdlsajflsajdfldjaslajf i do not deserve gah i am not wonderful sobs you are ;;
/runs away

[starsthatlast]

SOBBING BECAUSE THIS GAVE ME SO MUCH FEELS ;;;;;;; I like the way you use words, such as occasional glints of reality in the form of sunlight peek through the gaps, harsh and temporarily blinding. and a silent blanket draped over every surface that danced with glittering reflections of sunlight and lots more sobs.

You know, when kyungsoo was devastated and pouring his heart out over jongin's departure, I half-expected him to turn back and run away and never look back or some dramatic stuff along those lines lmao. BUT THEY MET AGAIN IN THE END SO TOUCHING i especially love the last line 'jongin starts running' because well, it's a powerful sentence and I don't know why the image was extremely vivid in my mind and just... wow.

but um, maybe it's me, but I did find it a bit messy but maybe it was because of the tenses? *edit* at first you wrote it in present tense then switched to past tense then went back to present tense if i'm not mistaken? from what i guess, some parts are flashbacks eg in the fourth scene when jongin wakes up

[chenstummy]

no no no i'm not offended at all!!!! i will never ever reject feedback :") i'm actually really glad you pointed out the tenses, this was written mostly between the hours of 11pm--1am and it was my first time writing a fic so i wasn't sure of what i was doing. i think the reason i wrote it all in present tense was bc i didn't want there to be such definite boundaries of past and present; i wanted jongin to be immersed and lost in his memories, but idk if it came across ;; i'm so flattered that you took the time to read this and wrote out such a long helpful comment ; u ; i'll try to write as much as time allows!! THANK YOU KIND SOUL!!! :''''''D

[thisismylastlie]

first of all

[chenstummy]

screams i was so distraught over the ending bc i had no idea what to do i'm glad you don't think it's weird? bc i still do aha
ug h ugh thank you so much for the feedback :') i didn't know what i was doing plotwise and tensewise and stuff but hopefully in next fics i'll get a better handle on that c: aaaaaaaaahhh my words are purring bc you're petting them :'D

[aquilaprisca]

I was about to punch you if this was going to be another sad ending but it wasn't, it was perfect, your writing is perfect, you're perfect, everything is perfect. "He swears he can still feel Kyungsoo’s tears all over him, before realizing that they’re his own." Did I mention how perfect it was? Ughhhhhh, I can't give good comments, sozo.

[glazeddoughnuts]

omg, I was like "is soo dead?" "Why does it seems like he is." "WHY IS JONGIN CRYING???" "why are memories hunting him?" "WHAT IS GOING ON???" and ooooh.... aaaaahhhh okay.

man I really love your imagery, my imagination is really working on this one. The way you described nature (and take note of the pretty gif above hihi), to the snow, to jongin and to kyungsoo ;;

one of those phrases I love was this "Contentment settles over them like a blanket of fallen snow, Kyungsoo’s pale digits, like rays of light, interlocking with Jongin’s dark branches." So pretty ;; perfection ;;

and the fluff moments (along with the nature) *whispers: please right more kaisoo fluff eue; hugs you*
I'll just imagine what happens after Jongin starts running.~ weee~