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cherprudence

Fic (Mostly Experimental)

Nov 14, 2004 04:26

So some of you might remember Manifest. This is the first part of the sequel and I'm really, really worried that this is OOC, badly written and stupid. So, comments/critisizm would be much appreciated. =/ seriously, if its bad fic, just be like "omg sux" and I will totaly be cool with it. I neeeeed to know for reals. <3 ( Read more... )

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hematite_dragon November 14 2004, 11:30:11 UTC

oooo, that was intense and pretty. I really like your writing style, wish I could put it in a way that helps more, but I liked this alot and can't wait for the rest :D <333 *tempted to fangirl you*

cherprudence November 14 2004, 21:47:20 UTC

XD;;;;;; After wednesday, I'll work on the second part *eyes the news few days* OMG hell. But I'm glad you like it. *faint* Its seriously stressin me out, lol

flamesword November 14 2004, 12:13:20 UTC

.....dude. what she said. oooooo, I like. ♥ I hadn't read Manifest before, and I can't comment on the characterisation because I know nothing about Rikkai...heh. *is bad and hasn't seen that arc yet* But it's not badly written at all....I loooooove your writing style, omg, so lovely and yes, intense in a subtle sort of way, and guh. teh pretty... *fangirls you muchly* I think it's a great start to a sequel. Write more, now! ^_~

also, friending you, in the interest of stalking as I still maintain you are so very stalkable. XDD so cute! ^_^ much love for you and teh Aki muse... *chu* <333333

cherprudence November 14 2004, 21:48:34 UTC

Eeek! stalker! *hides* =3!

If you liked this (I dont know whyyyy *hides*), Manifest is MUCH better. I'm actually sorta proud of that one, lol. But thank you sooo for commenting! And I shall add you as well ^_~

flamesword November 18 2004, 11:44:04 UTC

Ahh, my bad....I did read Manifest, actually, since there was a link, and really hon, they both roxx0rz. I don't think this one sucks at all...it's a very good sequel. Like I said, can't comment on the characterization, though it seemed pretty consistent to me, but the writing is definitely every bit as good. *hearts you* Write morrrrre, yessss! =3

(and sorry about the late response, been so busy! -_-;;)

cherprudence November 18 2004, 20:05:33 UTC

*bluuuuusshhh* Sankyuu so much! I really really appreicated it ^__^ especially since you dont know the chars--I know it can be kinda weird sometimes =3 I will definately write more this weekend tho!!!

(Its cool!! i've been supar busy too! <3333)

soloproject November 14 2004, 14:06:36 UTC

“I’m going to fuck you, Niou-kun. Slowly.” Yagyuu’s lips quirked slightly, drawing out Niou’s name like a caress.

You win. Oho~ You win.

JUST THIS ONCE. :o

cherprudence November 14 2004, 21:50:14 UTC

It didnt suck? *peeks out from hiding place* I promise there'll be some Jackal in the second part =3

soloproject November 15 2004, 06:39:58 UTC

If you put Jackal in this I will love you forever and ever even though I already do. <3

cherprudence November 15 2004, 13:02:21 UTC

XD <333! such motivation~ *swoon*

roll November 14 2004, 16:46:20 UTC

... =(

Breaks my heart.

cherprudence November 14 2004, 21:50:38 UTC

:( Gomengomen~! But the second part will be better, I promise!

seventh_shadow November 15 2004, 18:31:47 UTC

;-; Aww. I remember the NiouMarui you wrote. In fact, I've been trying to go back and find it for ages now, and this makes me so happy because I'm spared the trouble x.x;. *bookmarks quickly*

This one made me all teary-eyed T_T. Poor Yagyuu. And Niou. And the refrence to Marui about pink hair and sugar was absolutely devastating

cherprudence November 17 2004, 05:59:50 UTC

wow *blush* Eee, someone bookmarked meee! *dance* XD okay, sorry.

I totaly felt bad about breaking up D1--I mean, I love them! But I cant resist my OTP ^^; The refrence was actually the very first thing I wrote for it, back when I wasnt too sure about a sequel. >.> took me forever! <3

Thank you so very much for reading!! <333