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[One Shot] Summer Festival

Aug 18, 2011 21:02

Title: Summer Festival

Rating: K+

Word Count: 3,707

Disclaimers: I do not own any of the characters used here. They belong to their respective owners, namely the creators of Eyeshield 21.

Summary: Kotarou isn't making Julie's Summer Festival experience any better, but things take a turn for the better the moment she meets two familiar people ( Read more... )

fandom: eyeshield 21, fanfic, pairing: hirumamo

Comments 4

dayofcaligula August 19 2011, 15:47:22 UTC

“I don’t need you to start treating me like that Fucking Chibi!”

I adore their interaction here! I wonder how you made them work so well together... I am quite fixated with their college, but this is very lovely!

cherry_tiger August 22 2011, 01:22:58 UTC

Thank you so much! Admittedly, I was worried that their interactions here were a bit off, seeing as Hiruma and Mamori reached some form of quiet understanding by the end of their second year. But I'd like to think this is more in terms of football and not really for anything socially related. So they're still sort of stumbling their way through trying to really understand each other until they finally reach that point in college.

All in all, I'm glad you still like this! ^^

honey_bee89 August 21 2011, 14:36:45 UTC

Haha. I love Kotarou, he's such a loveable goofball. =D I feel a bit bad for him, though, losing so badly to Akaba last year and then to Hiruma this year. XD I think he should play against the very unlucky Taki next year. That should heal his beaten ego quite a bit. =D

And awww, Hiruma giving Mamori a stuffed bear was so cute! Mamori's affection for the teddy really showed in her actions. ♥ Also, the eating challenge thing is so like Hiruma! But with a challenge like that for Mamori, which should be easy enough for her because of her eagerness for sweets, I guess he really wants to wear a Yukata from her after all. ^_^

Lovely job on the story! It went perfectly with the prompt. =)

cherry_tiger August 22 2011, 01:45:31 UTC

Hahaha! Kotarou likes a good challenge but we all know he needs to watch his mouth quite a bit. Poor Julie, having to put up with him since childhood though! It'd be hilarious to see if Taki actually wins against Kotarou though. XD

And I'm glad you noticed the teddy bear and the significance of Hiruma's challenge! It's just like him to make things hard for her when in fact, he really doesn't mind her at all.

I'm so glad you enjoyed this! ^^