[One Shot] Dragon Fly

[cherry_tiger]

Title: Dragon Fly

Rating: K+

Word Count: 893

Disclaimers: I do not own any of the characters used here. They belong to their respective owners, namely the creators of Eyeshield 21.

Summary: The Enma Fires play witness to the true power of the Dragon by the Saikyoudai Wizards...

Notes: Sucky summary is SUCKY! But yeah, this was written for DA

Comments

[banditscribe]

This was so fun to read-thank you for posting it!

Especially loved the exchange between Mamori and Hiruma and Agon. Could picture it so clearly...and also the signal exchange between Hiruma and Mamori at the end.

Regarding your author's note: describing American football action is difficult, and I think you've done pretty well. The best way I can think of to help in descriptions is to pretend you're announcing a game, and you have to speak quickly as the action unfolds. For example, what I'd be used to hearing from an American TV announcer would be somthing like 'Banba's blitz results in an incomplete pass' or 'Banba rushes the quarterback, and the pass is no good!'

"That's the power of my angel, Mamori-san!" cried Monta, clenching his fists in awe. "She's so kind and gentle yet when you do something to cross her, she'll beat you up with her beautiful blue eyed stare!"

Awesome line. This is the best description of Mamori that I've read in a fanfiction. And there's no better choice to give it than Monta! *^__^*

[cherry_tiger]

Thank you SO much for the review! I really appreciate it!

The best way I can think of to help in descriptions is to pretend you're announcing a game, and you have to speak quickly as the action unfolds.

Ah! You're right! I should do that the next time I decide to write in a gaming scene. I rarely watch actual American Football... they show it in the sports channel here, but the timing's always off for me. I should make a mental note to check out ONE game for my own benefit of writing! Thank you for the tip!

Awesome line. This is the best description of Mamori that I've read in a fanfiction. And there's no better choice to give it than Monta! *^__^*

Aww, thank you! Monta really needs the attention, especially from me since I tend to ignore his existence in my fics sometimes. I'm really glad you enjoyed this!

[haqin]

It is hard for me to imagine how would Hiruma be in the same team as Agon along with Mamori as the manager. But I think your fic gives me the idea of how it will be!;)

Golden Dragon fly? Does it mean Yamato the third QB? I would like to see that!

[cherry_tiger]

I know! When I looked at the list of who'll be in Saikyoudai, I found it pretty hard to believe that Agon and Hiruma would be in the same team! But Agon changed a bit somewhere at the end of the series, so I'm sure despite their differences, they'll find some way to work things out... if not, there's Mamori to the rescue! XD

Yes, Yamato is the perfect candidate to be the third Quarterback. And just the idea of it makes me excited too! Agon, Hiruma and Yamato are such strong players! ^^