Wait For Me [ Chapter 6]

[cherry_tiger]

Title: Wait For Me [Chapter 6]

Rating: T

Disclaimers: I do not own any of the characters used here. They belong to their respective owners, namely the creators of Eyeshield 21.

Summary: A sequel to my earlier fic, Gravity. Time is moving faster than before, and one question will be on the mind's of both Hiruma and Mamori. How long is too long

Comments

[bar_ohki]

Great tension between the two scenes unfolding. A little unrealistic for the amount of time Hiruma spent talking to the other man and his running. You can say a whole lot in 20 minutes....

[cherry_tiger]

I considered shortening the time, but I took into account that Hiruma was running and he would enunciate his words a little slowly to take time to breathe. There were also moments where he would deliberately pause in between conversations as he focused on where to go. While the chairman would've been suspicious, he took it as Hiruma just trying to escape.

I would've made this more obvious but I thought it would be too distracting from the conversation which is the main focus between these two. Hope you understand the intent and glad it's all right so far. ^^

[dayofcaligula]

If Hiruma makes some noise with the Yakuza business I'm sure Mamori and Yamato in the city cafe would hear that to the point that Mamori wouldn't be able to answer the question. Since I have the end (the preview that you had me see last year on my birthday) in mind, I am really curious what will happen next.

[cherry_tiger]

For your first sentence, it's a possibility but I must admit I'm taking a bit of a different turn than what's expected. But yes, do expect that teaser scene to come up pretty soon. Will do my best with it. ^^

oh snap

[ext_1115859]

this is getting pretty intense....