Comments | cherryroad: Dr. Horrible fic: all roads lead to where you are (Penny/Billy, PG)

cherryroad

Dr. Horrible fic: all roads lead to where you are (Penny/Billy, PG)

Apr 25, 2009 00:04

title: all roads lead to where you are
fandom: Dr. Horrible's Sing-Along Blog
pairing: Penny/Billy, a bit of Penny/Hammer
word count: ~2400
continuity: Goes AU just before Slipping
warnings: Awkwardness, really short paragraphs, ridiculous amounts of dialogue
notes: Tamest thing I've ever written? Started out ironic and quickly deteriorated into ( Read more... )

length: 1k-2.5k, film: dr. horrible's sing-along blog, rating: all audiences, type: het

Comments 21

donteatacowman April 24 2009, 22:48:26 UTC

Even if this was intended at first to be normal fluff, I think you've expanded on the characters.

It was empty.
"Why is this place empty?" asked Penny.
^A bit redundant, and it doesn't sound purposeful.

I like the thing with the ducks. <3

Thanks for making.

cherryroad April 24 2009, 22:58:38 UTC

I think all the repeated words in this were on purpose. There's a lot more "he said, she said" than I generally use, too. Thanks for pointing it out, though -- I'm rereading again and just spotted a typo.

Anyway, I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for reading and commenting!

donteatacowman April 25 2009, 02:42:47 UTC

I once read an online article condemning the use of less generic words for "said," proclaiming that they are used far more often than necessary. I think you're fine. ;)

Sure! :D Thank you!

minkhollow April 24 2009, 23:42:29 UTC

Oh, poor Billy, being scared of... everything ever. ::hugs him::
Penny is awesome in this; it's always good to see her get a better shake than Joss gave her.

cherryroad April 25 2009, 20:29:41 UTC

The prompt told me to do that. That was all the prompt's fault.

I'm glad you liked this!

lilithisbitter April 25 2009, 04:13:20 UTC

Yay, you used my prompt, you used my prompt and did an awesome job. Go, Penny.

cherryroad April 25 2009, 22:25:00 UTC

I'm so glad you liked it. :D

midasu April 25 2009, 05:26:32 UTC

Wonderful. I think that you made them seem real. Great Penny voice.

cherryroad April 25 2009, 22:50:59 UTC

Thank you so much!

annemaris April 25 2009, 07:13:32 UTC

AWW. I seriously have no comments left, though that could be becuase this SPN preview made me very very giddy and now I can't think straight, but..

AW. This was adorable, it was so like... I'm so AMAZED at how you manage to find everyone's voices! Everything's so clear and right and eee (sometimes I think this should be an adjective, a word on its own. That's not true, I only thought of it now..). Amazing.

cherryroad April 25 2009, 22:47:49 UTC

Ooh. I hope it's good, I had to hunt my earphones down for this. -- oh, interesting. I haven't even seen this week's episode yet, because I'm a wuss and don't want to cry, lol.

Thank you! :D :D :D I'm really glad you thought what you said you thought. I can generally hear the voices in my head, but that could just mean I'm mad, so it's good to have a bit of confirmation.

Also, eee should totally be a word. What's the official term for it, anyway? Exhilarating?

annemaris April 27 2009, 14:40:31 UTC

Wait, why would you cry..? Idk, I didn't.

See, 'exhilirating' is way too long to use! Though it totally suits, mm. Like it.

cherryroad April 27 2009, 14:44:45 UTC

Because I always cry. But, besides the fact that I'm a total weeper, there's the part where getting into the ~emotional~ plot (i.e. the season's storyline rather than a single episode's) of Supernatural would make me suffer like a little bitch, I just know it.