Sins 1/7

Mar 28, 2005 00:53

here is the first sin. Me wanna thank everyone who reviewed and especially Rina-chan who helped me a lot to go through this and fight my laziness! thanks for your beta! ^__ ( Read more... )

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rina_chu March 27 2005, 23:07:26 UTC
Not really beta.. just a few tips ^^;;

I already told you what I think about the new chapter and I'm really looking forward to the next one *huggles*

btw.. I think it's Happy Easter? xD

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chibi_baka_neko March 28 2005, 22:09:17 UTC
nyaaaaaaa, you really did help me, i would never have thought of things like you do! that and pointing my mistakes so it's really more than just tips!

well, for the next chapter, i think you'll have to wait a bit, but you might see it...one day!lol

yes that's it! happy easter!
jeez, without my dictionary, i'm totally lost! -_-;;

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chibi_baka_neko March 29 2005, 23:09:31 UTC
*jumps everywhere and hugs* many thanks!! well, i must admit, i love to see a possessive Fuji as much as a possessive Ryoma, for me, they belong to each other! ^^

lol, "people's ass to beat"... i thought Ryoma would think like that...

about the Fuji-sempai thing.. i'm somehow glad you mention this! cause i didn't know what to write... i know they're the same age,with Syusuke being a few months older than Eiji...so i didn't know if Eiji should call him Fuji-kun or not...that's why i decided to used this form, but i can always say it's a way of showing Eiji's strange logic and love of using nicks! ^__^

anyways, thanks a lot for reviewing, and about the few spelling errors, i saw them too late, and couldn't correct them...or can I stil?? oO;; still am confused with LJ

Sloth might take some time but will be written one day!

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may_neuma April 8 2005, 19:01:17 UTC
Very well descriced of Greed. Just a few 'necessity' errors but all in all very nice fic ^__~ Can't wait for the next sin installment. You still can fix errors on LJ just edit the entry. I also can help you on name calling or whatsoever ^^ Ganbatte ne. sorry for commenting so late

MaY

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chibi_baka_neko April 8 2005, 20:54:34 UTC
thanks a lot! ^____^ glad it stayed focused on 'greed' I feared it wouldn't be 'enough' and i didn't want to put here events i wanted to keep for later.

hm...by 'necessity' errors, what do you mean? *aurelie quite intrigued and willing to learn more in order to correct errors*

name calling... yup, help wuld be gladly accepted! by watching more episodes last night, i noticed that Eiji actually calls Fuji 'fujiko'. i didn't notice earlier. :3 well, would you mind if i bug you when the next chapter is finished in order to check it?

and no pb about late comment! ^__~ I myself often forget to review while reading, so am catching up tonight! ^o^

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may_neuma April 8 2005, 21:24:02 UTC
Well, according to the last episodes Ryoma won against Tezuka, Tezuka won against Fuji which means automatically Ryoma is stronger than Fuji. But Fuji could give Ryoma an impression that he won't be able to beat him still for some certain reasons ~__^ that is the 'necessity' error. It's not something big ^^

"Nya, Ochibi, arigato!!! You made it! Now Evil Momo-kun has to treat us! Eiji-sempai is so proud of you!" Eiji always calls Momoshiro -> Momo or Momo-chin (twice) so this part is kind of weird. That's the name calling part. And yup only Eiji that calls Fuji like that. The rest are calling Fuji by his family name except for Yumiko 'Syusuke' and Yuuta 'Aniki' Mizuki 'Fuji-kun' and his kouhai 'Fuji-sempai' Sure do I'll be more than happy to help you. Just AIM or email or whatever for checking ^^ <3

MaY

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chibi_baka_neko April 8 2005, 22:16:56 UTC
honto ne?? Ryoma beat Tezuka??? @_@ i so wanna watch them now!!! but am only at the 115 one...the others are slowly being downloaded...ok, now i understand the errors thing! ^__^ maybe i should out AU in the disclaimers... thing i always forget to put in the fics... -_-;;

hm, thanks a lot for this, i'll go back to the entry ...one day... when i feel less lazy... *yawns* PoT episodes time!!!lol sush a cool way to go to bed! ^__~

aurelie =^-^=

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