The Persistence of Memory

[chickadee1607]

This is the short story I wrote, which I'm submitting to both a writing contest and as a final project for my creative writing class.  I already asked a few people to critique it, but I'm posting it here too under a cut so anyone who has a little time on their hands can skim through it if they want and give me their general opinion.  Those who don'

Comments

[kaboodleschmitt]

Hehe, well, I have to say I saw the ending coming, but that's okay - overall, it was very well written. At first I was noticing there were clumps of short sentences, but then I got into the story so I stopped noticing such things... Hmph!

I was almost expecting some sort of mass drugging or something for the 3 distinctly different views on what happened, but it was fine without it and made sense and stuff.

So yeah, I like it, well-written, and good job.

[chickadee1607]

Thank you. :)

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