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1. Name of story: "The New Ninja"
Name of Author: RileyJessieHall
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Summary: this is a story about GenmaShizune. Shizune gets pregnant. whos the father? is it genma the one she loves or someone else? why is she so afraid to say who's the father? Tsunade pushes for answers and gets them. Genshi Sasusaku and others...
2. Explanation of why the fic is bad. Note that all opinions should be justified. Don't just say "OMG sasusaku suxors." Instead, say "This SasuSaku fic sucks, and this is why."
Reason for disliking this "fanfic": The writer had me at Shizune, Genma, and Pregnant. She baffled me with "Or someone else". I thought I'd give it a try, because, you know, we've all read that fic where the summary is horrible, but the story is actually pretty damn good. Um, no. The thing that mainly pissed me off was One, the set up of the writing , which is basically no paragraph, all single sentences. The punctuation is horrible. The spelling is just as bad. But what really nuked my nutmeg was the AUTHOR'S NOTES RIGHT IN THE MIDDLE OF THE DAMN STORY!! I hate nothing more than to read author's notes in the middle of a sentence. You couldn't let me know before the story? You couldn't let me know at then end, after I've read the chapter, and formed the questions?! Maybe I didn't care that you love Hayate, and you decided to keep him in the storyline, or that, you know, Hayate and Genma are 'Brother's from another Mother, so he's going to be an "uncle", so you know, that happens sometimes!!". That is all. Enjoy the show. :(
Name of Author: RileyJessieHall
Possibly the URL for the story: Type your cut contents here.
Summary: this is a story about GenmaShizune. Shizune gets pregnant. whos the father? is it genma the one she loves or someone else? why is she so afraid to say who's the father? Tsunade pushes for answers and gets them. Genshi Sasusaku and others...
2. Explanation of why the fic is bad. Note that all opinions should be justified. Don't just say "OMG sasusaku suxors." Instead, say "This SasuSaku fic sucks, and this is why."
Reason for disliking this "fanfic": The writer had me at Shizune, Genma, and Pregnant. She baffled me with "Or someone else". I thought I'd give it a try, because, you know, we've all read that fic where the summary is horrible, but the story is actually pretty damn good. Um, no. The thing that mainly pissed me off was One, the set up of the writing , which is basically no paragraph, all single sentences. The punctuation is horrible. The spelling is just as bad. But what really nuked my nutmeg was the AUTHOR'S NOTES RIGHT IN THE MIDDLE OF THE DAMN STORY!! I hate nothing more than to read author's notes in the middle of a sentence. You couldn't let me know before the story? You couldn't let me know at then end, after I've read the chapter, and formed the questions?! Maybe I didn't care that you love Hayate, and you decided to keep him in the storyline, or that, you know, Hayate and Genma are 'Brother's from another Mother, so he's going to be an "uncle", so you know, that happens sometimes!!". That is all. Enjoy the show. :(