Comments | chuck_the_plant: "Artyom's Arsenal" - Brigit's Flame Oct. 2012 week 2 contest entry. Subject

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"Artyom's Arsenal" - Brigit's Flame Oct. 2012 week 2 contest entry. Subject - 'intimacy'.

Oct 09, 2012 16:52

Title: "Artyom's Arsenal"
Brigit's Flame, Oct. 2012 week 2 entry.
Prompt: Intimacy
Wordcount/Warnings: 755 words, rated PG-13 for one swear word
Author: Graham Patrick Smith (chuck_the_plant)

I have to admit, this one was inspire by playing a little too much 'Metro 2033', a fantastically underrated shooter with a rich story, set in the sewers of ( Read more... )

new york city, apocalypse, nuclear, intimacy, brigit's flame, russia, war

Comments 6

keppiehed October 15 2012, 12:35:26 UTC

This was a new and interesting type of story for you! Yay for trying new things! I'm glad that you were inspired to write something so gritty. I'm not sure I see where the prompt played a part in this story, but I hope that you continue to push your boundaries as a writer.

bluegerl October 15 2012, 14:24:20 UTC

Oh YAY. I LIKE this one. The hard man.. a hard life. and then two quiet inner softening moments... the 'smile' of the disappeared man, and his assessment of a womans life condition. He 'felt' something for her as he'd not have made that assessment otherwise. It would've been just a sale. This guy has - humanity...

Thanks again Chuck, and ooh you do write some corkers. XXX Blue.

keppiehed October 18 2012, 12:39:35 UTC

Hello! I'm one of your editors this week ( ... )

dodos rolling out the edit wagon,he pauses bardiphouka October 21 2012, 00:46:59 UTC

Having done my own research here, I am going to agree with Keppie. This is a very powerfully written piece, but you should have let people know it was fanfic. This was not a piece influenced by the game, it was a piece written within the game. Which is not an inssue per se, just something that should have been mentioned.

And I am curious as to how intimacy played a part here?

innana88 October 19 2012, 00:20:51 UTC

Bullets as currency: wow, that's a really chilling idea!

chuck_the_plant October 19 2012, 14:44:25 UTC

Thanks for the comments and the constructive criticism, everyone! The dystopian landscape that is taking the modern fiction world by storm really intrigues me, so that's why I decided to craft this story around a "bug" that was place in my head by the aforementioned game. I hope that the small moment of intimacy between Artyom and his customers came through as I intended! :)