Comments | ciel_dao: no one is convinced

ciel_dao

no one is convinced

Jan 28, 2010 16:05

no one is convinced
Jinki/Taemin+ Minho & Seohyun, Taemin POV
mostly angst, slight fluff. pg-13 for wet dreams and swearing.

Points for whoever gets where the title/cut-text comes from.

( come on, come on let's be brave. )

shinee

Comments 21

xxqod January 28 2010, 21:22:02 UTC

I like the part where his dream comes back to him and he wakes up, the repeat of that part.
Really nice done!

And it should be awkward being with Jinki in the same room xD
Minho is always so observant ^^ gotta love him for that.

<3 ~~

ciel_dao January 29 2010, 13:59:25 UTC

can you imagine waking up from a wet dream...to find the subject sleeeping RIGHT NEXT TO YOU. that would be so bad :p

thank you for reading!

kisa829 January 28 2010, 21:38:31 UTC

Ah~ It's a never ending cycle, eh? Taeminnie, you should just admit to your feelings!

Great story! A bit sad but it works well. XD

ciel_dao January 29 2010, 14:00:25 UTC

it was supposed to go on and on and be huge and epic, but i decided to end it there. it did work out, but i'm considering making this chaptered. or at least more stories in this 'verse. what do you think?

thank you for the concrit!

kisa829 January 29 2010, 18:12:27 UTC

Honestly, you could leave it as is and I think think it's brilliant. Although making this chaptered or writing in the same 'verse would not deter from impact of this part itself.

Or even, if you were to make it chaptered, I can imagine writing it in such a way that things change little by little each day. Sorta like, it's almost the same as the previous chapter but one thing changes that moves the story and characters towards the ending/climax, ya know?

Well, that's just what I imagined after reading your reply to me. :p Whatever you decide to do, I'll be sure to follow it~ ♥

rikli January 28 2010, 23:25:25 UTC

oh oh love it **___** like a hundred times :D

ciel_dao January 29 2010, 14:00:57 UTC

yay! thank you :)

soasian101 January 29 2010, 00:21:29 UTC

GEEUHHH *and some more blahblahblah*

Tis osm.

ciel_dao January 29 2010, 14:01:29 UTC

^^v thank you~

anonymous January 29 2010, 08:11:40 UTC

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THERE ARE NO WORDS FOR THIS BRILLIANCE, OK.

google is my best friend lalala

NO FREAKING WORDS.

ciel_dao January 29 2010, 14:03:05 UTC

google, you hath betrayed me! anonymous, you get 100 billion points minus 1. because you used google :p

thanks for reading!

anonymous January 29 2010, 14:09:05 UTC

lol obviously i still win!

/hides

i honestly think you're an incredible writer, never ever stop (: