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cityfibers

Death Note: Still Frame

Mar 06, 2009 21:23

Title: Still Frame
Fandom: Death Note
Rating: PG
Word Count: 1,287
Notes: Written for dn_contest . Prompt was "Linda."

el_plato_sucio wrote a great remix of this, Screenshot.

She is a smart girl, a brilliant girl. She knows this because her teachers say so when she can remember everything in her textbook, down to the crooked crease along the page (why can't other people do ( Read more... )

fandom: death note

Comments 6

dayari March 7 2009, 13:20:20 UTC

Oh my God, this was perfect. *applauds* I completely love this. It was so intense, and also slightly creepy, and overall heartbreaking--I love how you made me read through paragraphs and feeling uneasy, like they were building up tension towards something, and then feeling like one of your sentences slapped me. (In a good, 'I totally didn't expect this' kind of way, though! XD) "Linda supposes it's easier to plan a funeral than fix a life." was one of those.

Overall, just awesome, and thank you for posting! ♥

cityfibers March 9 2009, 01:13:12 UTC

Thank you! Actually, haha, that was the line that got me to write this fic in the first place. I just really wanted to use it for something.

versipellis March 7 2009, 16:28:01 UTC

Cool! I really liked the way you touched on all the other kids at that orphanage, and the eerieness of it - especially the last line. I love her reasons for talking to Near. Nice work!

cityfibers March 9 2009, 01:47:41 UTC

Thank you, glad you liked it. :)

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cityfibers March 9 2009, 01:32:19 UTC

Linda was such a minor character that I realized, halfway through this, I probably couldn't write her interesting enough without linking her to other characters. Though on the other hand, you could make up practically... anything about her. XD; Thanks for the comment!

speaky_bean March 11 2009, 03:23:04 UTC

Oh, this was absolutely brilliant. Linda would be rather difficult to write about on her own without making a lot of things up, so involving her with other characters was a smart way to get around that problem. The photographic memory thing was a nice addition, too--it's good to know what, exactly makes these kids so brilliant. And your A was just...devastating, and the way you tied that in with her only canon line, about Near, was very clever. Also, I'm very fond of the 'and all Linda can do is--' bit--that was very well handled, a lot of people would have made that sentence needlessly clunky. Over all, magnificent job. Great to have you in the community, I hope you'll post again! ♥