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fanfic; cue cards and fix-it kits (jacob/bella)

Aug 14, 2009 14:44

Title: Cue Cards and Fix-It Kits
Fandom: Twilight Series
Character/Pairing: Bella, Jacob/Bella
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 2095
Summary: "You’ve stopped pretending; fix-it kits and fake smiles work temporarily, but you realize it would be quite a stretch to assume you could hold the façade for an eternity." Bella can't lie to herself anymore, and she ( Read more... )

character: jacob black, book: the twilight series, character: isabella swan, ship: jake/bells, !fanfic

Comments 21

jane_wanderlust August 15 2009, 03:06:33 UTC

Ugh god, so good it hurrrrrrts.

And yes, she's right.
Before the unmentionable tragic ruining of the characters in the unmentionable ruin of a book....this is what should have happened.

I mean, if it had to get to this point....then this is how it should've frickin turned out!!
Ahhh the frustration burns with the amazing goodness of this fic.

bloodfusion August 31 2009, 12:19:28 UTC

Aw thank you so much for the comment.

I wish it had have been this way. It should have been this way, or something similar, but ugh Meyer had to fuck over the characters. I wish she'd have just made Bella choose Jake and damn the consequences. But I guess we knew they were doomed from the start. :( But whatever, let's just live in the world of fan fiction instead. :D

stretch August 15 2009, 05:48:17 UTC

Incredible - short, sweet, and to the point. You didn't waste a single word, and yet you managed to make every one deep and captivating. I usually don't enjoy second person perspective (usually because it's done horrifically) but it really works here, and you handle it well.

My favorite line, though I'm not quite sure why it stands out from all the other lovely turns of phrase you use: This is life, and that you realize, is entirely the point. This is your cue. Maybe because it's just so direct and poignant and very true as far as Bella is concerned.

In conclusion (since it's late and I'm rambling here): awesome :)

bloodfusion August 31 2009, 12:21:46 UTC

GAH THANK YOU SO MUCH. Seriously, comments like this make my day. I don't usually enjoy second person either, but idk I love writing it. I'm so glad it worked. :D

Thanks again. ♥

haydn_hottie August 15 2009, 10:53:11 UTC

WOW. This is great! Thanks for sharing =D

bloodfusion August 31 2009, 12:22:07 UTC

Thank you! <3

emgrace4 August 15 2009, 18:41:56 UTC

OMG, that was so beautifully written. I'm practically speechless. Great job with the emotions - this is how it should have ended.

bloodfusion August 31 2009, 12:22:37 UTC

Thank you so much. ♥

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bloodfusion August 31 2009, 12:25:12 UTC

LOL MASTERCLASS.

THANK YOU BB, ILY. ♥ It's my favorite thing I've ever written too, which is why I ended up coming back to it.

Haha, the original version no longer exists anywhere, I don't think. But there was quite a lot changed, mostly really small things. Except the entire last paragraph is complete new. I wanted to include Jake somehow. :)

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