5 or ten years down the road

[buckshot_mc]

I slept on leaves, swam in shallow creeks and wore the same thing 8 days straight

Comments

[majestic_lies]

The first and second line dont have the same tense. the first line starts with I, as in you have been doing it, you are doing it. then the second line says ive, as in throughout your line. keep your poem in the same tense, its really important. that made me read the first two lines again, distracting me from the rest of the poem.
Also, the second line, left in dusty canals, what does that mean?
also, the third line seems really out of place. It seems like it either need clarification, or just simple rewording.

Try to convince loved ones I was sorry, I would never cause hurt again.
this line and the next lines change tense again. making me reread them
Prove i would never make the same mistakes.
Tear up all that ugly past and try again.

these lines are awkward with the rest of the poem. It might help if they were in a different stanza, a lot but where they are they just dont belong.

[forgottenevil]

it leaves a lot for interpretation, and that I enjoyed about it.
a lot of interesting imagery when its all placed in relation to each other.
I think the title was a good choice. It provides a whole new dimension, and provides a different meaning for the whole piece