Pinned with Flowers

[clocksheep]

Title: Pinned with Flowers
Chatacters: China (& Korea)
WARNING: rated R for disturbing subject matter (infanticide).

Comments

[clocksheep]

Thank you so much for the comment! I'm glad the innocent tone worked to add an extra layer of disturbingness, that's what I was going for. Same with the idea of China thinking he was doing the right thing, I think all the nation-tans just want what's best for their people.

And if you want to draw something based on this you can ABSOLUTELY do so! That would be amazing. ;w;

[clocksheep]

Omg, this is perfect. ;__; I love that first panel, and China's expressions. Thank you so much! ♥

(D-do you mind if I link to this in the author's notes? With credit to you of course!)

[min19]

Wow. I agree with everything cher_arlequin said. This was incredibly well-written and yet disturbing all the same. I read the warning, but then when I started reading, I was shocked to see the mood and how everything was set. But, then as the whole childbirth took place, the doom started to settle in and holyjeezy, even though I knew what was coming, it was still the shock of my life when he killed the baby.

Also, I read the other fic you posted (which I am going to comment on in the near future) and you didn't use "aru", which I found reasonable considering the mood of the story. However, when I saw China using "aru" in this one, it was yet another surprise, since I was expecting a more sad narrative. However, it did work to your advantage! The contrasting moods worked really really well in this fic, and it's almost a haunting effect.

This is very very well written, and it darkly portrays a subject that most people are afraid to write about. I applaud your skills, my dear friend. :D

[clocksheep]

Thank you so much for the review! I wanted that moment to be a shock but in kind of a disconnected way because of the cheerful tone, so I'm glad it worked out.

To be honest the main reason I didn't include 'aru's in the other fic was because I completely forgot orz, but after thinking about it I decided it would be silly to edit them in due to the mood, like you said. I'm so glad you think the contrast in this fic works. Thanks again! ♥

[clocksheep]

Ah of course (I'm one of them :D) and he has many at his own place too. I wrote it like that because of the state of mind he's in after the murder, he's not really in a happy place. Also he's making a (rather romanticized) comparison to the past, thinking how things have changed.

Thanks for reading! :)

[clocksheep]

Aww, that sucks. ;___; *hugs* But yeah, I think the restrictions are being relaxed. According to my sources (umm... which is wikipedia orz) it's decided provincially now, and some people can just pay a fine to have more children (which won't work for everyone, but at least it's an improvement).

[whitesin]

Wow... This was incredibly disturbing, in a wonderfully weird fashion. I have to admit, I didn't see that tone coming, not when the warning read "non-graphic infanticide." It's- creepily cheery and thus, you can see the darkness underneath it all. You don't see Yao being examined like this in the fandom, his dark side, particularly his recent history. And yet, I don't see any blame here, no painting of him as evil and irredeemable and cruel. Instead, I can almost pity him. Almost.

I loved it... because it's one of those stories that ultimately makes you think, uncomfortably so. And we need stories like that.

[clocksheep]

Thank you so much! ♥ I agree, I'm sure it's out there but I don't see a lot of dark fic with China; I guess because his canon portrayal is always so cheery, and I love that side of him, but I thought I should explore the other side too. Thanks again! I agree, I love stories that force you to think. :)

[ohdeko]

I really love how you write.
This is very different to other fics I've read- the atmosphere totally threw me off at the start, knowing what was coming.

I like how you portray China's character. His love and pride towards his people is something that really stands out to me in your writing.

I'm not a fan of using 'arus' in fanfiction, it seems to only work for me in illustrations/comics, but nevertheless I loved everything else about this piece.

Thank you so much! <3

[clocksheep]

Thank you so much! It seems like it threw everyone off, which is what I was trying to achieve so that's good. <3 I think of all the nation-tans as being really loving towards their people, but something makes me think that China is one of the characters, among others, with just an extra bit of pride. Or I don't know, maybe they're all like that, I haven't thought it through. :P

I never know what to do with the 'aru's. Honestly I don't like them either, but if I don't use them I'm afraid people will think I'm taking too many liberties and he's poorly characterized. u_u But it seems like people don't really mind, so maybe I'll try dropping them from now on.

Thanks again! and can I just say that I love your art haha ♥

[clocksheep]

Ahh, I'm glad. His accent is really ridiculous. xD