Ahhhhhh! --I was SO nervous about your response to this chapter. Like, really REALLY nervous, lol.
In any case, don't worry... there won't be a whole lot more. It goes right back to PG/PG-13 territory after this, and pretty much stays there (except for one or two more spots, but nothing too graphic). The purpose of it here was to kind of push Logan in the "hm, Veronica IS kinda hot/sexy" direction ;)
I'm extremely sorry for the delay in getting this posted. My anxiety over the smut (even in terms of editing it) is kind of to blame- good news is, Chapters 6 and 7 are already close to being post-ready, so hooray!
Anyhoo, enough with the blabbing. Glad you liked it!
The fact that you wrote smut caught my eye--first thing when I saw this, but I enjoyed it, and what it did to further this story. It's important that Logan have had this dream, if only to get him to act on it more than he already has (because, much as I'd like Veronica to have taken the first step, I don't think it fits with who she was pre-Lilly's death.)
As for the smut itself--I think it worked well. I know some authors have certain words that they use to describe anatomy (or some who just don't use anatomy at all and just talk about pushing in and out.)
I'm glad that you recognized the semi-significance of Logan having this dream. That was part of the reason I wrote it in the first place... to get him into a kind of mental headspace where he starts looking at Veronica as more than just a cute girl, and sees that maybe there could be more to his attraction to her :)
Thanks for your positive feedback on the pr0n... I wasn't expecting it to be fantabulastic my first time out of the gate, but the fact that you didn't hate it is enough for me, lol.
Hopefully your curiosity won't have to last too long. I've got some serious next-chapter-editing time blocked out for tonight, so we'll see how it goes :)
OMG that's so good. I can't wait for more and the sex scene was HOT!!! You should definantly write more cause I'll definantly read it. I know of a journal that's about writing sex scenes and I'll leave the link to it here but I don't know if it will help. Anyway I can't wait for more. PLEASE hurry up with chapter 6 I may die if I don't get to read it soon (and I'm seriously not joking). I love this fic more than words can describe and I hope you'll update soon. My life depends on it. Don.
I don't know what else to say except THANK YOU :) It makes me all kinds of glad that you enjoyed it... and thanks for the link. I'll take a perusal, who knows, maybe there might be a helpful tidbit or two ;)
Anyhoo, thanks again for the wonderful feedback! I'm definitely gonna be spending an hour or two editing the next chapter tonight, so hopefully it'll be up soon!
I think you did very well in the smut scene! There were a couple descriptions/words that were a teensy bit off-putting, but overall, I loved it :) You shouldn't be nervous at all because, like Roz said, Logan needed to have this kind of a dream in order to pay attention to his feelings for Veronica.
Don't be afraid to write more smut! I look forward to reading more of whatever you give us.
Yay! As I said above to afrocurl, I'm glad the importance of his dream is standing out a bit. I didn't want it to seem like just gratuitous smut (though I'm sure no one would really have a problem with that, lol...) because in the context of this fic I wanted it to have some purpose. So yeah, happy it's coming across as such :D
Thank you for the con-crit as well... do you mind if I ask either what lines you're referring to, or what you mean by 'off-putting'? Do you mean you found them slightly offensive/unsavory, or just that they didn't really do anything for you?
Feel free to not answer (or, to answer via e-mail instead of LJ comment)- like I said in my post-chapter A/N, I get that this is a weeeeeird thing to be asking for 'help' on, lol... but I'll probably be trying my hand at this again sometime in the future, and want to do so in a way that doesn't make people go "erg, that wasn't so much fun" ;)
As usual though, thank you for your wonderful comments.
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i dont mind the smut put i'd prefer there not to be much.
its just im 17 and i dont really wanna read about it lol
im glad the story is still going! :)
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In any case, don't worry... there won't be a whole lot more. It goes right back to PG/PG-13 territory after this, and pretty much stays there (except for one or two more spots, but nothing too graphic). The purpose of it here was to kind of push Logan in the "hm, Veronica IS kinda hot/sexy" direction ;)
I'm extremely sorry for the delay in getting this posted. My anxiety over the smut (even in terms of editing it) is kind of to blame- good news is, Chapters 6 and 7 are already close to being post-ready, so hooray!
Anyhoo, enough with the blabbing. Glad you liked it!
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relax.
anxiety = bad. :)
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As for the smut itself--I think it worked well. I know some authors have certain words that they use to describe anatomy (or some who just don't use anatomy at all and just talk about pushing in and out.)
Now, for what comes next, I'm very curious.
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I'm glad that you recognized the semi-significance of Logan having this dream. That was part of the reason I wrote it in the first place... to get him into a kind of mental headspace where he starts looking at Veronica as more than just a cute girl, and sees that maybe there could be more to his attraction to her :)
Thanks for your positive feedback on the pr0n... I wasn't expecting it to be fantabulastic my first time out of the gate, but the fact that you didn't hate it is enough for me, lol.
Hopefully your curiosity won't have to last too long. I've got some serious next-chapter-editing time blocked out for tonight, so we'll see how it goes :)
Hehe, as always though, thanks for your feedback!
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http://community.livejournal.com/writing_sex/
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I don't know what else to say except THANK YOU :) It makes me all kinds of glad that you enjoyed it... and thanks for the link. I'll take a perusal, who knows, maybe there might be a helpful tidbit or two ;)
Anyhoo, thanks again for the wonderful feedback! I'm definitely gonna be spending an hour or two editing the next chapter tonight, so hopefully it'll be up soon!
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Don't be afraid to write more smut! I look forward to reading more of whatever you give us.
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Thank you for the con-crit as well... do you mind if I ask either what lines you're referring to, or what you mean by 'off-putting'? Do you mean you found them slightly offensive/unsavory, or just that they didn't really do anything for you?
Feel free to not answer (or, to answer via e-mail instead of LJ comment)- like I said in my post-chapter A/N, I get that this is a weeeeeird thing to be asking for 'help' on, lol... but I'll probably be trying my hand at this again sometime in the future, and want to do so in a way that doesn't make people go "erg, that wasn't so much fun" ;)
As usual though, thank you for your wonderful comments.
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Thanks for your comments though :) Hopefully there will be an update coming soon (and I actually mean it this time, lol!)
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