Comments | cmdrtekk: Dance to Catch

cmdrtekk

Dance to Catch

Sep 13, 2011 17:15

Red Alert nodded - but kept his optics on the lounging corner where Smokescreen and Sideswipe appeared to be in deep discussion - as Inferno joined him at the table sitting down with his own cube of energon. “Glad to see you finally made it out to join the rest of us Red.”

Red Alert frowned at the familiarity Inferno offered with the shortened ( Read more... )

community challenge response, prowl, 'verse: light dancing, red alert

Comments 9

fianna9 September 14 2011, 01:04:44 UTC

very interesting world. I'm hoping to see more of it, and I'm curious about Red Alert's place in it.

cmdrtekk September 15 2011, 03:42:13 UTC

I think this was a poor choice to use for a prompt. It was easy enough to write, practically writing itself for the most part, but I found my self going back and half filling in information that will come before this point time line wise in the overall in an attempt to offer a clearer picture to the reader. And I still think I failed ( ... )

renegadewriter8 September 14 2011, 02:08:24 UTC

Awww why'd you end it there? * pouts* I love this verse can't wait to see more!

cmdrtekk September 15 2011, 03:49:43 UTC

Well, glad you liked since I think I failed miserably with the prompt. The scene practically wrote itself, so from that standpoint it was great. But at the moment, aside from me, few will understand everything going on here. And that's after I went back and filled in a lot of "blanks" information wise in an attempt to give the reader a clue. And most of that is info that I think will be covered earlier time line wise in the story (once I write the scenes of course). This posted version has 1000 more words in it than the original draft, and most of them are me trying to give the reader some idea about what is going on

Anyway, as always I appreciate your reading and leaving a comment.

Hope your trip is going well.

usagi_atemu_tom September 19 2011, 12:22:08 UTC

Honestly, I don't think you failed with this prompt. It reads well, it has Prowl obviously interested into Jazz and they had an interesting discussion about Prowl's emotions and wishes. All in all it was an interesting and rather curious way to fulfill the prompt of dancing. The only thing, after I've reached the end now that I am wishing for now, would be a sequel of a kind to see if Prowl succeedes in getting Jazz interested in him. I would so love to see Jazz reaction and thoughts about Prowl. ^^ But that is just a personal wish and honestly this stands perfect just as it does.
Well done job!

lobaeclipse September 21 2011, 19:45:03 UTC

This looks wonderfully interesting. I love this fic, so I am going to have to check out the rest of this 'verse ;)

cmdrtekk September 23 2011, 03:25:03 UTC

I haven't posted much else from this verse. Hope you like what there is though.

Thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate your taking the time to do so.

zea_taylor October 21 2011, 14:48:57 UTC

This was fascinating. I like the way you present both bots in this, hinting at so much of their skills and the background, while keeping the focus on the moment and the potential problem Red Alert is facing. I'd like to see more of this 'verse in future, as the whole thing adds an extra layer of intrigue and complexity over the whole Autobot/Decepticon conflict.

cmdrtekk October 23 2011, 23:14:01 UTC

Thank you for reading and commenting. I do greatly appreciate it.

I do actually have quite a bit more in this verse. I have this dream that I might actually have the majority of it completed before posting. But right now it is very rough and there are quite a few things to track and lay out I am discovering.

Again, thank you.