Yet further proof that I have no life...

[cn_the_impaler]

So, after a year of letting the idea lie, I've decided to continue my Metal Gear/Evangelion crossover.

I was going to keep it to myself until I had more of it written, but I think it needs some concrit from people who know the characters... that is, all two of you reading this who qualify on that count. I think it could use work honestly, but I'd

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[celesma]

This is excellent! <3 There are some grammatical errors here and there but the dialogue, the characters, the action scenes and BIG BOSS are simply splendiferous. (Also YAY, Berserker Eagle and Mantis/Rei friendship!)

There are sometimes commas missing where one character addresses another, such as in, "You alright Boss?" but it's not really a big deal. Below are some spelling/grammar errors that have been fixed.

"Tired," Jack replied, "but I'll be fine. Just need to get this done."

he would have preferred the Angel to spear him in the gut rather than grab that wrist

And no one asks me what I think of anyone unless they're trying to discreetly find out what I've read in that person's mind."

"Big Boss told me about your fight," she said, grinning. "I heard it was pretty awesome. Sorry I didn't get to see it."

And so the power of cleavage conquers another innocent male victim, Eagle thought, scowling. Skank.

it falls to me to make sure Shinji has what he needs to succeed both in and outside of combat.