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[coconabanana]

KHRMINIBANG 2009 FINALLY OPENS

~Requiem in the Rain~
[14.443 words]
And that is my fic. GO! READ! IT! NAO!

The fic that I wrote when I was in the middle of exams. The 14k words fic that I wrote in less than a week. The fic that I planned to write since a year ago. The fic that I put all my sweat, blood, and effort, and tears, to write. The fic about

Comments

[ekmisao]

Thank you for talking me out of it, lol. ^^v I like this version better too.

[coconabanana]

YOU ARE WELCOME!

Did you make any major changes? Because I haven't re-read it again. =3=

[ekmisao]

No major changes. ^^

[asatosei]

OH THE LAST STAGE TOUCHED ME MOST
the way you write those feelings and situations is adorable ;A;

oh lol at first I frowned deeply, "did Amano ever draw Yamamoto's mather?"
and "because I don't follow Reborn anymore or not, but who's Fubuki?"

carefree people looks more pitiful then they who can let their sadness showed right on their face

[coconabanana]

YOU READ IT?! OHMIGAWD! -SPAZZES-

LET ME BREATHE BEFORE I REPLY TO YOUR COMMENT!
KJASGHDKJASDGH

[asatosei]

W--WHAT'S WRONG DDDDD:

[coconabanana]

BECAUSE I NEVER THOUGHT THAT YOU'D READ IT!
-cough-

I AM LOVING YOU SO MUCH FOR READING IT! ;_______;

And my favourite part is the last stage too~ It's the longest of the three and gee, I think I cried a little when I wrote how Yama mama died? /brick'd

No, Amano never draws Yama Mama. That's why I wrote this fic, to just fill my desire to see what kind of background Yama has.

AND FUBUKI IS AN OC! LOL. I thought I've put the brief explanation on the endnote.

And yes, that carefree boy keeps so many things inside his head that I didn't know of and I think I almost banged my head to figure out how to delve into his brain. But I work it out! /o/

[snapdraw_gone]

Read it, saw the art (love the perspective its done BTW), reread the fic and when I go home later, I'm going to reread everything again because I'm in an Internet cafe right now and I don't exactly like reading long stories while on a public Internet connection.

But I dropped by to tell you that you've definitely improved from the last time I read something of yours in terms of plot flow.
Well done! Give yourself a pat on the back! I'm honestly happy for you. ^^

P.S. I added you again some time ago but you haven't added me back although if you don't want to that's OK too.

[coconabanana]

I AM SO BLEEDING FREAKING SORRY FOR NEGLECTING YOU! I FORGOT! And the fact that I rarely checks my eljay notification just adds more fails to my side. ;3; *adds you back*

And okay, I thank you so much for leaving such comment! If I'm not improving, I'd be dead, and my beta will not love my writing anymore. LOL. But, it has been almost half a year since I first writing to the time I wrote this fic. There bound to be some improvements, right? And now, it has been a year since I started writing fic, and I don't even want to look the disaster that is my first fic. XD;;

Thank you, thank you, thank you again, for reading and leaving a comment here. I'm glad that you at least, I think and I hope, love the fic I wrote.

O_o;;;

[snapdraw_gone]

Whoa, LOL. Chill, I'm not mad. ^^ I just figured you were busy or Hetalia-smitten (as is the rest of the world but me...;P)

OK, now that I had some time to read the fic more thoroughly, here's my real feedback: I can definitely see how hard you worked on this for over a year. Quite an achievement considering Yama isn't your favorite character. Angsty Yama, check under 'OK'. Yama back- story, check under 'OK' too... and I saw plot and I prefer it when fics have plot so I put that check under the 'OK'. ^^
Now I understand you had three betas? ^^; Not to doubt their abilities or anything but I felt that there were some sentences that were a bit awkward in wording (or that's just my personal opinion =_=; Don't mind me. I've been reading some archaic-worded things lately.).You made good use of OCs to add dimension to the general plot. ^^ And the friendship between Iemitsu and Tsuyoshi is a rare but interesting part of the canon to be explored. I'd like to applaud you on trying out something out of your comfort zone. n_n

Re: O_o;;;

[coconabanana]

And you should know that my posts nowadays are 90% Hetalia. XD;;. I don't think you'd survive this. My KHR muse just flies away into nothingness with Mukuro's disappearance (again) in chapter 25. ;3; *kicks AmanoI may have three betas but actually they only worked on the first phase of the writing, meaning before the first deadline. I lost any mood to edit anything anymore after I finished this and when the deadline to submit this fic for the comm opening, my main beta was in life and death situation a.k.a. on exams. So, because I didn't really want to bother her anymore, I just sent the fic the way it was as the first time I sent it to the mod, with some minor editing. I liked it, and think it won't be much trouble anyway. I've tried my best

[redmoonmurder]

I think I've told you before, but I really really really love fics that involves breaking down how a character works. I enjoyed reading yours so much~ A-aah, I feel bad for not being able to make the art as awesome as I had intended it to be :x I'll send you a better version once I get Painter back on the computer ;Dv

[coconabanana]

Awwwh~ Youuuu~ <333 Thank you. I'm glad that you liked it. 8Dv

Sure, just send it to me and I'll put it in the fic, when I re-posted it next week. Thank you so much again! =3=

[finite_farfalla]

UBER LONG FIC IS UBER LONG.
I'm saving it to read tomorrow.
Wait for my comment k. ^^;;

[coconabanana]

I LOVE WRITING UBER LONG FIC. That's my only excuse. XDv
Ok, I will wait. >3