Ghoul fiction, part 3

[codex_umbris]

(Yet another ghoul post. I have felt like writing a few of these based on the amazing RP going into this. That, and something had to mark the game with the blindfold. Yes, I wore one as a prop and half the game didn’t know how to respond! Comments are welcome, as I'm wondering about how I'm writting this.)

Comments

[pcharacter]

This was amazing. I really liked the first two, but I thought this was excellent.

I think you're writing very well -- if you're looking for ways to change it up, try moving away from the dialog format. Just give us the iner monolog; relay the dialog only as needed.

I'm sorry I never triend the whole blind fold thing :) That was a spectacular idea.

[codex_umbris]

Most of the scenes are in dialog, so it's easiest to fit the lines of thoughs between them. A lot of his dialog I've found compelling, as it shows how he is breaking and remaking his mind. I know I need to work on my writing skills. I may do a pice of her alone. But the ones where he is training her are the most fun for me.

It's a troupe game, and most of the players hadn't seen the really intesntive costuming. Roger asked me about it before game. I agreed, after we talked, and I brought the sash to the suit to use as the blindfold.

It came across amazingly well, and people did NOT know how to ask him about it. They weren't used to the slightly imersive costuming.