Lady

[coldthermistor]

Title: Lady
Fandom: Inception
Rating: PG-13. Nothing particularly dangerous, oblique reference to sex.
Characters: Arthur, Ariadne
Summary: Done for inception_kink prompt. Ariadne had boyfriends in the past but was usually referred to as cute and never taken very seriously in her relationships. The five times when Arthur told Ariadne she was

Comments

[irishcookie]

Oh this was lovely. Arthur really is the ideal man here - very to the point but at the same time doing wonders for Ariadne. (I wanted to kick Eames here a little for feeding her insecurities). The ending made me grin wide! Great job!

[coldthermistor]

Thanks (:

Well, I don't know, for this fic, Eames came across as a bit of a prick, I suppose. He's a bit careless in that kind of way =/

Glad you liked it (:

[thatreevesgirl]

I really adored how you used second person here. I don't see a lot of fics in it, and I personally think it is damn hard to write in, so kudos to you, because it is the best tense for this story.

It’s always as if he sees you for you; and you like that, just the same way you like the matter-of-fact way he says you’re beautiful, in the same tone he uses to describe paradoxical architecture or kicks.

OMG, that line, thatline, made me just squeal with delight. It was just so Arthur and it was the point in the fic that really made it real. You did such a nice job with the characters. I loved how you gave Arthur moments where he relaxed and was more carefree

[coldthermistor]

Thanks (:

The second person was a bit of an experiment, because I've seldom utilised it, so I wanted to give it a go. (And partly because of the nature of your prompt.)

I'm glad you liked it (:

[lovelylytton]

This is gorgeous - I like the poetic feel of it, like how you dealt with Ariadne's insecurities and also how you write Arthur. Well done!

[coldthermistor]

Thanks (:

I was trying for something vaguely poetic here, given the prompt, so I'm glad it came across - I was worried it bordered being pretentious.

Glad you liked it (:

[scarlet_ebony]

Ah, this was just about the sweetest thing ever! I love the little private moments between them, unspoken words that only they understand. And Eames being a jerk and Arthur not approving - that was gold. Thank you for posting! <3

[coldthermistor]

Thanks (:

Hmm, I wouldn't say Eames is a jerk, he's just trying to help in his own way, but he is a bit of a prick, yes.

Glad you liked it (:

[kore_rising]

Normally I'm not crazy big on the magical/realism strain that can take over some fic, but you've managed a really good balance of poetic, romantic imagery and realistic emotional language here. The repeated eyes/mirrors motif is just perfect for this, as is the mention of Narcissus. You've got a nice depth of character too, which makes this delightful.
And Eames, well, I think he'd behave like that in the belief he was helping in his own, slightly callous way. Or, I chose to believe that :D
Lovely, thank you!

[coldthermistor]

Thanks (:

Question - what is magical/realism? :S I've tried Wiki-ing it but the description there is rather vague =/

I agree; I figured Eames was trying to help, in his own way. He's a good guy, he just enjoys being a bit of a prick. That's what I choose to believe, anyway ;)

Glad you liked it :)

[kore_rising]

Yeah, I just looked at it and it does remind me of an undergraduate essay I once had to write! Basically, magical realism is describing the real world in fantastic terms in order to heighten the reader's sense of the being immersed in a real (albeit imagined) world. It turns up a lot in sci fi and fantasy novels; Neverwhere, American Gods or The Sandman series by Neil Gaiman, anything by Angela Carter or Jeanette Winterson, One Hundred Years of Solitude, all are considered to be magical realist to name just a few.
In fic (and I know, because I am guilty of doing it myself!) it can change from a delicate image to a ton of hyperbole with just one too many adjectives. What you've got with some of your images (the axis of the world shifting, the coal and ashes, Narcissus' pool bending light) is off set with a sense of disbelief, Ariadne's unwillingness to admit she might be beautiful, and that stops them tipping over.
How's that? :)

[coldthermistor]

Okay, since I'm getting literary discussion here (hurrah!) where does the sense of disbelief originate from? >.< (Sorry, I just like to learn techniques, so I'm rather curious.)

Thanks for the explanation! It makes far more sense than the wiki entry, certainly. All I got from Wiki was that a lot of Portuguese writers do it, which was...vague. (: