Nicely done, only thing i can think of to critic is the distence they traveled after only half a day that would have had Fang even think they could out run a large preditor, and make it back the Village. They must have been flying. Also, what are their ages in this? I keep picturing between the ages of 12-10(fang), and 10-8(Vanille). Otherwise you paid close attention to the small things, which made it really interesting to note of and give that kind of 'Dawww' feeling. Which helped with the young character developements. I think we all can agree that the first sleeping scene was unbarable cute, and the last one that followed was too. Damn good job, hope the next chapter will be out soon. r/r later
Lol, sorry about not making the ages clear within the story, guess I can post more clearly their current age at the start for the next chapters at least. But ya they're like, 15-13 in this one. Hmm, why Fang ran from the monster, can't really offer a good reason for that one, haha, I just went with the flow >.< I'm glad you liked the little details, lol, I tried to add as much as I could without over doing it. XD Thanks! I haven't started the next one yet, but I already have the general idea of what it will be about, so hopefully within a few days. :)
Hahaha, glad I could get a good reaction ;) I tried to put in enough cute moments to even things out, and will try to keep them within the chapters to come, but I can honestly say that things do become a bit more intimate from here on out. spoiler! o .o
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Hmm, why Fang ran from the monster, can't really offer a good reason for that one, haha, I just went with the flow >.< I'm glad you liked the little details, lol, I tried to add as much as I could without over doing it. XD
Thanks! I haven't started the next one yet, but I already have the general idea of what it will be about, so hopefully within a few days. :)
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I can't wait for more from you!!!
Fanille 4ever!
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