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colorfulkitten

Our First... 4

Mar 19, 2010 20:50

Our First Seperation…
Rated: R (for blood, little gore and suggestive sexual situations)
**PLEASE READ** Author’s Note: First off, I’m so sorry this chapter took so long to finish. I also want to say that this chapter contains things that some readers may find disturbing, so I do apologize if it grosses anyone out, use discretion etc etc.. This ( Read more... )

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tigon_0 March 20 2010, 03:41:49 UTC

That was an awsome read. It was good, and I'm not a grammer nazi so I'm not gonna ding you on it :P. Smut really>? I was expecting thats at all, coming from a titale such as "our first...", wasn't expecting it at all. Especially after that drinking scene infront of the whole village, then later while there in bed. OR earlier when Fang was admint about not doing something till after Vanille's big hunt...I can't wait for the next chapter now O.O. Good luck and keep the good humor too, it's always a joy to read when someone adds some real humor to their stories. R/R later!

colorfulkitten March 20 2010, 05:38:16 UTC

Haha, thanks. :) Ya I know right?! Who needs a smut scene anyway?! I'll just make Fang be forever sexually frustrated by Vanille. *nod nod* I'm making myself sound sadistic, HAHA. XD I shall try my best to keep a touch of humor around though ;)

tigon_0 March 22 2010, 04:16:44 UTC

I just have to add this, I think it's funny that alot of people are noticeing that your ending your chapters with them sleeping together. Scratch that, it's hilarious XD

colorfulkitten March 22 2010, 04:39:48 UTC

Lol, ya, I've been questioned about the fact on FF.net. XD (I'm cutting out all the smut scenes, DUH!!) :D

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anonymous March 20 2010, 05:46:50 UTC

I love this chapter!!!
theres so much sexual tension in teh air you can cut it with a knife!!!!
and what are u talking about !!! of course we need the smut LOL!!!

colorfulkitten March 20 2010, 06:58:02 UTC

XD Thanks! Lol. glad you liked it so much!
Ya, I've built up a lot of tension between them, I was actually going to have the smut after the ceremony, but the logical side of my brain said, "where the hell is Vanille going to have the energy to have sex right now after everything? XD"
ROFL XD we do?! DAMN, I'll try to make a smut scene good enough to please X3

electra_red March 20 2010, 09:33:01 UTC

I absolutely LOVE this story! It's so cute and funny! Not to mention all the sexual tension its greeeat :) Anyways I can't wait until your next update! Keep up the great work :3

colorfulkitten March 22 2010, 04:43:57 UTC

Thank ya~ :) All about that build up ;) I'll be getting the chapter started shortly :3