College essay! Criticism needed (and appreciated)!

Dec 12, 2006 23:12

Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you ( Read more... )

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beldar December 13 2006, 17:14:30 UTC
Hope you'll pardon the nitpicking, but I presume the finished product will have paragraph breaks. The word "of" is missing before "Ozark Folk" (and I don't think the F needs to be capitalized ( ... )

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commiepenguin December 14 2006, 02:06:19 UTC
Thanks for the in depth work. That's exaclty what I like and what is so hard to find.

Ironically enough, my father designed the WAC lot (the fountain was his brainchild; they pump the water from a spring underground), and my mother works for Bill Underwood.

There's the Fayetteville Free Weekly, but there really isn't much hope. They're building a new HS that's going to be pretty because, according to the school board, that is an important issue. The rec is still there, but the pub is gone.

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beldar December 14 2006, 12:52:49 UTC
Hope I didn't offend there, so you probably remember the teapot tempest that preceded the fountain.

And I don't have anything against Underwood personally, his would still be the first place I'd go for an engagement ring or other fancy jewelry if I were in the area. Doesn't mean I like everything he does outside the jewelry biz.

The Free Weekly is a pale shadow of The Grapevine, but at least you've got something.

I see a lot of what you are talking about up here, but of course there are major differences. The high schools are struggling with the area's population growth and needing to expand, but all the plans call for seven-figure sports complexes, which are making the property-tax-payers who are footing the bill livid.

The gentrification process has been happening in Indy's cooler neighborhoods, but when that happens, the bohemians and common folk just move on to another similar neighborhood, something you can do in a sprawling city of nearly a million, quite another problem in a small city like Fayetteville.

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commiepenguin December 15 2006, 03:11:00 UTC
No offense taken. Oddly enough, Bill Underwood is now fighting the development-because they're out of town developers. So he's building his own condos instead. At the least, his money stays in the area.

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