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[compos_mentis]

[VOICE] [NOT ACTION I AM A LOSER SOMETIMES]

[For the record, Nina's voice here is younger sounding than most people who've met her will recognize because as opposed to her adult twenty-something year old form, she's in a teenage sixteen-ish year old form. The voice is still recognizable, just less matured]So, this is where new people arrive, is

Comments

[ voice ]

[hippocraticly]

I think some of it's due for a revision before you even think about ending it.

[ voice ]

[compos_mentis]

Got any pointers for me, doc?

[ voice ]

[hippocraticly]

Re-phrasing the whole weakling bit might be a good start.

[ voice ]

[compos_mentis]

Mm.. Yeah, I can see your point. Seems a bit trite.