Well done! This was a very creative way to lose one of his senses. It was intense in that you never knew how badly he was injured because he couln't feel it and you were very clever on how you described how it felt for John. Quite cute at the end when Ronon had to keep reminding John that he was thinking out loud. *giggle* All in all, a whole lot of awesomeness! What a great Christmas gift to your fans. Merry Christmas and Thanks!
Thanks! Glad the loss of touch worked. It was tough to juggle between what he could feel and not feel, and still keep up the intensity of the survival situation and chase. Thank you for your comment!! Merry Christmas to you too! :)
Oh, that was brilliant! John losing his sense of touch - not that's an interesting twist, doubled by him unable to feel pain and so not even knowing when/if he was being injured. And with that Reshtiv guy after him, it was all so intense. Wonderfully done :D
Thanks! :D I really liked the prompt, but I wanted to do something a little different with the loss of a sense than what I'd seen before. Glad it worked here!
You know I love stories with a survival theme and this was no exception. The whole setup really pulled me in especially because of the unique predicament and its impact on the situation. I enjoyed the descriptions of what is was like for Sheppard to be without the sense of touch as well as the sensations he was able to access and use. Very creative. There were nicely done teamy moments to round it off, too.
Thank you!! Any time I get a prompt that's remotely survival-related, I'm going to jump all over it. I love reading and writing those kinds of stories. :)
This was a lot of fun to write with the added twist of the loss of a sense. It was tough to juggle what he was feeling and not feeling and still convey his whole experience. This turned out to be a great learning experience for me, on top of the fun of writing it. Glad you enjoyed it!
oh thank you! That was such a fantastic answer to my request! :D The sense of touch wasn't the first one I thought of, but it worked so well! And he really had to compensate for it while still trying to survive.
the description in this story was so good, I could really picture it and feel what John was (and wasn't) feeling ;) I loved all the little missteps, like burning his hand, from forgetting that he couldn't feel anything, or just not realizing that, day to day, he'd feel something that he now couldn't. I also think the idea of the alien flash bang was very ingenious!
So thrilled that you like it!! Thank you! I loved the prompts you gave and I wanted to find something a little different to do than loss of sight or hearing. I figured loss of taste and smell would be hard to make exciting, so touch it was! It was challenging to convey what he was feeling while not feeling anything on the surface, and I realized how often the sense of touch does come into my descriptions of what a character is going through. This was fun to write and I learned a lot in the process!
I really try to come up with unique prompts for stuff like this, because its fun to see how people interpret them. They usually involve Sheppard being heroic or strong though, I'm SUCH a sucker for that. I thought losing a sense would be interesting to explore.
I love how you did this! :D
I can imagine it was very challenging to write what he's feeling when he can't feel. LOL but you pulled it off expertly! :)
Glad you enjoyed writing it as much as I enjoyed reading it. :)
I enjoyed this story very much and I love that you not only addressed the big things (not feeling the wrist break or the fall from the cliff) but also the little things like the burn or the "something could gnaw on your fingers right now" scenarion. :)
Thank you! I wanted to try something a little different than what I'd seen done before with loss of a sense. It was tough at times but fun to write. Glad you enjoyed it!! :D
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This was a lot of fun to write with the added twist of the loss of a sense. It was tough to juggle what he was feeling and not feeling and still convey his whole experience. This turned out to be a great learning experience for me, on top of the fun of writing it. Glad you enjoyed it!
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the description in this story was so good, I could really picture it and feel what John was (and wasn't) feeling ;) I loved all the little missteps, like burning his hand, from forgetting that he couldn't feel anything, or just not realizing that, day to day, he'd feel something that he now couldn't. I also think the idea of the alien flash bang was very ingenious!
Great story, thank you! :D !
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I love how you did this! :D
I can imagine it was very challenging to write what he's feeling when he can't feel. LOL but you pulled it off expertly! :)
Glad you enjoyed writing it as much as I enjoyed reading it. :)
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I enjoyed this story very much and I love that you not only addressed the big things (not feeling the wrist break or the fall from the cliff) but also the little things like the burn or the "something could gnaw on your fingers right now" scenarion. :)
Thank you very much for this fic! :)
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