Comments | corizzle73: I update too much.

corizzle73

I update too much.

Oct 09, 2005 23:25

Today was cool, liz came over and we....did nothing, actually. hahah i really cant remember anythign we did...anywho, it was cool. I got a new hoodie + other things yesterday at the mall :)

this rain is so depressing! gosh and itll take a whole week to finally let up :/

oh!!! so the other day Nelson e-mailed me the sweetest letter EVVVVER ( Read more... )

Comments 14

gvthesuave October 10 2005, 03:34:33 UTC

i love it ( ... )

corizzle73 October 10 2005, 03:36:42 UTC

wait..you jsut copied the whole thing....hahahaha you dork.

its relaly not that good..idk. i guess since i wrote it, and ive read it so much its gotten old. *shrug* thanks tho for your comments and the fact that you like it, its what keeps me writing.

gvthesuave October 10 2005, 03:38:03 UTC

but i'm serious, out of all that you've written, that is my favorite one..i love it so much i want a copy

it really hits me you know and i love it so..shut your face.

buttmunch..

love your gracie

corizzle73 October 10 2005, 03:40:05 UTC

hahaha you cutie.

[love your gracie]

yeha you KNOW youre mine!

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charcoal_eyes October 10 2005, 03:58:10 UTC

nice nice...

tho the one sentace with this in it:
while you were speeding down the road you're now on.

needs tobe rephraased a bit the tenses sound funny.
awsome tho!

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charcoal_eyes October 10 2005, 04:16:46 UTC

But you never did; always careless and independent you didn't give a damn who got hurt along the way while you were speeding down the road you're now on.

I think i would have done something more like this:

But you never did; always careless and independent, you never gave a damn about who got hurt along the way.... ((kinda gets weird here)) when you were speeding down the road... ((somethingsomething))

Im nnot sure...but theirs just something about that sentance that i cant put my figner on, and im too lazy to take out my grammar book.

blah.

more later if i think of it.

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Thread 5

i like the closing line... myinksmyblood October 10 2005, 04:18:30 UTC

the last line got me thinking, i like it.
now all i have to do is free verse for you and speak frnech

much love_Dave

Re: i like the closing line... corizzle73 October 10 2005, 04:22:56 UTC

thanks for the comment :)

yep...next time we talk on the phone youre SO speaking french. AND free versing. haahha

no pressure, though. =P

oh snap i gotta write you a letter, huh.

~Cori

0rockinmimz0 October 10 2005, 15:46:40 UTC

NELSON! I remeber him! Who could forget Nelson lol. Nice Writing :)

corizzle73 October 10 2005, 16:44:02 UTC

ahhh! i know!!

hah thanks :)