Lizard

[countingcr0ws]

Title: Lizard
Author: countingcr0ws
Pairing/ Characters: Yunjae
Rating: PG
Form: One-shot
Genre: AR, Lucid, Slice-of-Life
Summary: Yunho finds himself in a relationship with the frontman of a rock band who lives on the edge of life for his art.
Inspired by: Lizard by Banana Yoshimoto

Comments

[loyersyeraomar]

gosh yunho is so nice to jae! jae u better treat him better! muahahhaa

[countingcr0ws]

Ahh, they'll be like old couples, shuffling and holding hands and huddling for warm in the whole subsistence way. Haha, yep.

[loyersyeraomar]

hahaha...well that good! lol

[believeinred]

wow. just.... wow. this is...emotional? idk the word. it's just full of emotions [for me tho] XD

thank you for writing ♥

[countingcr0ws]

Haha, thank you. Actually I kinda washed my brain out after writing this after my friend had this 'kid. I don't get what you're writing at all' moment on me. And I got really scared and my brain shut down, haha.
The table next to me in the restaurant is smoking and I'm like :( and the guy said that the salad was free BUT IT WASN'T, OH MY GOSH. I am annoyed. And the ketchup wasn't free. Omg.

[believeinred]

HAHAHAHHAHAHA. whaaaaaat??? how could a ketchup not be free? :O that is...harssssssh. LOL

[countingcr0ws]

IKR. PRECISELY. we were like dudeeeee, we should have like used the whole bottle. We were like ;A;/ let's never leave Galati (a city in Romania where we're living, like we went to visit constanta in Romania where the weird restaurant was)

[stupidfroggie]

Waaah this was beautiful ! I liked it very much. In fact, I don't often leave a comment, but I love the way you describe your characters; it seems so realistic, yet so different from real life. (I don't know if you see what I mean xD)
Anyway, this story is really great, and I love Yunho's patience and Jaejoong's confession. They are just made for each other ! ;___;
(Ah and btw, enjoy your trip, Romania must be a splendid country to visit !)

[countingcr0ws]

Yeah! As in I get what you mean! Haha. Wait. Did you mean like different from real life as in reality like how the world works or how Yunjae actually is like as they are like characterisation? But yeah. Haha. I guess its due to the writing style. :/ I'm sorry for the late reply though. I kinda had a lot of stuff to do for the program and can you imagine drawing happy crickets and mosquitoes?? Omg. That was like the first time ever I mean like nobody ever replies like 'I'd like an ant' or like 'I'd like a dragonfly' so yeah. I had to figure out how to draw those, lol, like the first time ever and erm yeah. Romania's pretty cool, haha. Help. :D its kinda cold in the night though. Heh.

[ligerliger]

I always come back to your writing for your style I can analyze in pieces like this. I LOVE the way you think, it's so artistic and I feel like you can describe things in a million different ways and they'll all be unique.
"There was a sad smile on his lips, and I wanted to comfort him, but who would comfort me?" this line was so sad :( but ah... I loved it so; it made me pause and think for a bit ouo
I thought this was a really introspective fic, not exactly euphoric nor depressing, but a sort of statement about their relationship and that they're... content. it left me feeling calm ^^
very sweet... their relationship works for each other, and I think that's what matters in the end imo; and they seem to be opposites which tend to attract!! ahaha \o/
P.S. whoa, Romania! that's so cool, one of my friends lives there :3 I hope you're having a good time!

[countingcr0ws]

Ahhhh ligerliger, you have worldwide connections like MacDonald's! And irdk how to put it, but you're really good at reading stuff, oh my gosh. So like I feel like it really doesn't mean anything much, as in this story, which is kinda like what you said, haha. And I don't write like this usually (you know, right!), like I usually adopt the more conventional fanfic style. :( like story telling and the quietness idk, its kinda hard to write the kind of stories that I like, like the shoujo style and stuff. :(((( and when I first saw your comment, I was like zomg, ligerliger is still active in the fandom!! And I was like /excited kid. I hope that the fandom still excites you? :/ D

[ligerliger]

I do? xD hahahah if you say so~
yeah, it was different :o but I think that's good! writers grow when they write out of their comfort zone imo ^^ but aw, honestly I've just read less Yunjae fics.... it's not that I don't like DBSK; I'm just not reading as much :c plus some of the writers I really cared about (including you) have moved on already and ah.. it's sad :c
omg yeah, it must be a huge change of climate o.o awwww /protects you from the sun/ I'm sorry the beach wasn't very awesome D: but lol, I'm sure your mates were staring at the guys instead of the girls hahaha but I totally understand where you're coming from; I'd stare at everyone~ I love people-watching lol though I don't particularly enjoy the beach... oh well. sand gets everywhere :/

[countingcr0ws]

Crap. I totally replied all things irrelevant.
Anyway, I feel like the sentence was kinda heavy. Like the who would comfort me. Like I Actually liked it too, so I insisted onleaving it there even though I didn't think that it was like fitting, like I felt the precious sentence doesn't lead to that. :( maybe its me and I'm just being weird, omy gosh. So like I read like a moderator post in some community before, and like the person was like keep your AN distinct from the body of the text and stuff like because if I thought that it was really good, and I'm all excited and wanting to leave a nice comment of exclamation &c and you're like omg, it sucks and stuff and all insecurity bla bla, shoots self down, bla bla, and she said that she'd be like less excited about it and stuff and I don't want to be like terrible. :( sorry. :(

[abbysidian]

Your writing is worth a lot of everything, it's so light and lucid. I love how the scenes laspes around, but ultimately steers back to the present conversation. The ending gives me warm fuzzy feels ^^

[countingcr0ws]

Oh my god, I'm amazed that you even managed to follow this. I reread and edited this again yesterday and I was so lost when the scene changed and I really need to explore ways to express time transitions and I'm kinda bowled over that you think that its good because I think you need to focus a lot to get the story, but I'm simultaneously thankful and grateful for your compliment. But haha. I don't think I have that in me anymore? As in the whole weird writing aspect thing. I was actually amazed when I reread some of my stories yesterday, not in the shameless self promotion kind of way, but a wow, I seriously don't remember this , wow. I can't believe i wrote this, kind of way. And thanks for dropping by and leaving a comment! I'm sorry that I took so long to reply but eh, I've been kinda out of the ship for a while and I've been trying to find my way back and I've started to write but I sound weird in a completely different end of the spectrum kind of way. Its weird. Really.

[abbysidian]

While it was confusing at first, I think what makes it so complex--and ultimately great--is the fact that there is no clear transition. In order to get the story, you need to read closely and pay attention to each little word the author puts down. The reader needs to connect to the characters, and with such a short oneshot, it's outstounding to see how you supply so much emotion and backdrop that makes something like Yunho's one-sided love hurt so much. I also have to say that I was not expecting Jaejoong to reciprocate Yunho's love in the end. I was prepared to rage fit in the comments about Jae being a stupid a-hole to Yunho hahah.
I understand the whole losing interest in the ship. I'm going through something similar, but I like to revisit old fanfics that I love. If not for the pairing then for the fantastic writing :) I hope you continue to write! Your stories are so wonderful :)

[countingcr0ws]

yeahhh. i was rereading it again and editing it once more and i was so lost because it kept going back and forth and i didn't know what period it was. D:
and art never comes from happiness anyway so /whispers/ i don't know how legit it is that jaejoong got together in a real relationship with yunho. you can throw a rage fit anywya, hahaha. i'd lol.

and omy gosh. i'm feeling 10 shades of guilt because i got back to writing but my writing's all fluff stuff nowadays. very ehh. /shrugs/