Chapter 1...errr...a part of it...

[coupjarret]

My novel that I'm working on. It's got a good plot that I won't tell you, and the story is good too - but how's the writing? Let me hear your reactions. I guess the tagline for it could be: "What if you lived in a world where anything was possible?" That probably sums it up best. Anywho - let me know what you think. Be honest, please. I'm a

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Nice.

[little_yume]

I've only had time for the prologue but- You have a wonderful way with words. There were a few typo's that need to be fixed, and I would recommend(and goodness knows you'll listen if you want to!) you take out the contractions(and write out the words), you've written this bit on dreams so eloquently that only seems to take away.
I'll read the rest soon and let you know what I think.

Chapter 1

[little_yume]

You need end " after the first line of speech from the Old Man. Other than that, excellent work... if not a tad confusing.