Comments | cowboyhat: challenge #1 - Prompt #5: Night Vision

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challenge #1 - Prompt #5: Night Vision

Mar 12, 2014 18:51

Title: Sadness or Euphoria
Prompt: Night Vision
Word Count: 573
Rating: PG
Original/Fandom: Glee
Pairings (if any): none
Warnings (Non-Con/Dub-Con/Underage): none
Summary: When Artie is having a hard time in the city, Rachel takes him to see Coney Island. spoiler fic #50 million.

( Is the amount of time spent on the journey really the end of the world? )

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Comments 3

xonceinadream March 16 2014, 01:34:37 UTC

This was really sweet. I love seeing a sweet side of Rachel in fic and it was interesting to see Artie being a bit insecure in the big city. I imagine that the kids probably should've felt more insecure in canon and so it's nice to see it explored in fic. I think you could've benefited a bit from adding some more description but it was a very nice story anyway. I definitely love their friendship and it's nice to see Rachel being supportive. :)

cowboyhat March 16 2014, 03:02:51 UTC

Thank you! I wish they would show Rachel being more supportive and yeah, i think seeing the kids be a little insecure could be really interesting. It's funny cause I know not having enough description is my weakness but I never know where to put it in.

xonceinadream March 16 2014, 19:45:47 UTC

I agree. Rachel has her moments of diva-ness but she's also a good friend when she can be. I definitely understand with that. Trying to be descriptive is one of my weak points. What helped me was just trying to picture it all and then write it down. Little by little it adds more description. But it's lovely work anyway. :)