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untitled poem
Apr 27, 2006 21:54
I trust the red sun setting (
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mentaluprising
April 28 2006, 03:17:53 UTC
I dunno, the last stanza doesn't really have any imagery so it comes off as sounding a bit trite to me. Also I don't like the word reliable in there. Seems to muddle things up.
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cradledalone
April 28 2006, 03:39:38 UTC
seriously, be some sort of english teacher
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mentaluprising
April 28 2006, 04:23:01 UTC
Man, you know I don't like kids.
Oh, and I don't not like the poem, just not my cup of tea.
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cradledalone
April 28 2006, 16:41:44 UTC
that's cool, that's cool.
so what if you don't like kids, if you do your job you would still get paid.
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mrs12oz
April 28 2006, 03:25:31 UTC
I like it.
this part is my favorite
on monday morning I look forward
fearlessly to friday's eve
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Oh, and I don't not like the poem, just not my cup of tea.
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so what if you don't like kids, if you do your job you would still get paid.
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this part is my favorite
on monday morning I look forward
fearlessly to friday's eve
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