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[cranehaven]

night's silence
broken by a steady rain
another day-
this rising dawn,
this waning life.

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[wicapis]

another sunset
another lily withers
this late spring
rain keeps trickling
for one more night...one more day

[cranehaven]

Ah...! Yes...!

strong pivot "this late spring"

Lovely

I hope you are well

warm wishes

~P

hello paul and santha

[b_oki]

The wet night
brushes against the eaves
these lively branches
dance with erotic rhythms
in and out of a dream.

b'oki.

Re: hello paul and santha

[b_oki]

OOH...!!!

I find the first two lines highly charged erotically which is underlined and reinforced by the phrase "erotic rhythms" in line 4
leaving the speaker weaving in abd out of dream states

Lovely!

~P

Re: hello paul and santha

[b_oki]

and thanks for inspiring, paul...glad you enjoyed :)

warm wishes,
bette.

Re: hello paul and santha

[cranehaven]

My pleasure, Bette,lately, with increased professional responsibilities, I find it a lovely luxury and treasured moment to share here.

Warm wishes

~P