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5 Times Bella Swan Almost Drowned - A Bella Swan Fanfiction

Jan 10, 2010 20:11

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fanfiction :: twilight :: jacob/bella, fanfiction :: twilight :: bella

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nekobot01 January 11 2010, 03:05:20 UTC

Wonderful! I loved it - of course Bella wanted to be a mermaid... :)

stretch January 11 2010, 05:45:03 UTC

Thanks for reading, dear! Yeah, as I was writing this the whole SMeyer/Mermaid thing was heavy on my mind ;) Still, it seemed like something a 5 year old would want. I mean, who didn't want to be a Disney princess at some point?

iluvpoto January 11 2010, 12:53:55 UTC

I still wanna be Pocahontas ;)

stretch January 11 2010, 16:37:35 UTC

See! My point exactly!

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_argustar January 11 2010, 03:15:57 UTC

Is it possible to hug a fic? If so, I'd really like to hug this one. <3

Widdle bitty Bella trying to be a mermaid and trying to cope with Leah Clearwater and the kiss and I may die of squee, don't mind me.

stretch January 11 2010, 05:46:30 UTC

Awww, that's so sweet. Though I'm not sure you can hug a fic, I'm pleased that you at least want to try with mine ;)

(And writing Little!Bella was so much fun. I think I like her better when she's a kid instead of a whiny teenager.)

voiture_jaune January 11 2010, 03:18:59 UTC

I am dying, this fic is so wonderful. It's very light, almost, and perfect and why is it not real. It is, though. Bella is so very in character in each segment, especially the final one. I love the metaphor of her finding her way out of the water and breaking the surface, as compared to leaving Edward behind and embracing Jacob.

Just, guh. LOVED it. ♥ Thank you!

stretch January 11 2010, 05:50:32 UTC

Thanks hon. I'm glad you liked it so much. I'm glad all the metaphors cam through - I was trying to make them clear without being heavy handed. And you're not alone, I wish shit like this was real too. Bella's more likeable as a kid ;)

asweetdownfall January 11 2010, 03:21:19 UTC

Oh, this is so lovely and presh. I love it.

And the last line slays me. <33

stretch January 11 2010, 05:52:32 UTC

Presh = exactly what I was going for. Kiddie!Bella was just too much fun to write. And that last line was a total bitch. It must've gotten rewritten a dozen times, so I'm glad it came out alright in the end :)

greeneyed_me January 11 2010, 03:39:59 UTC

Wonderful center theme to the fic!

I love reading fics like these, they make the world go round.

This was written perfectly. I hope to read more from you!

stretch January 11 2010, 05:53:32 UTC

Thanks. I never thought drowning could be a good center theme to anything, but apparently it worked :) I'm glad you liked it so much.