The Painter.

[shoelace009]

I looked up. It was one of those nights where I had nowhere to go so I just picked a star in the sky and followed the streets I thought would get me closest to it, ignoring the fact that none of the streets were on hills and I wasn't climbing any higher. It didn't matter though because I wanted to be closer to the star, not in possession of it.

Comments

[gracemcgrath]

Fascinating. Watcy out for sentences too long - Dividing up into bite-sized chunks, even if they don't all have a verb! gives much more punch. The non-verb sentences are okay, because this is first person, and we often speak and think non-grammatically!
Look forward to more!
love and blessed be
xxx

I thought

[xguhx]

the "too-long" sentences were just fine, not too long at all.

I, too, thought this was fascinating.