Comments | creekstersheart: Consciousness Streaming

creekstersheart

Consciousness Streaming

Jul 01, 2005 21:59

Trying to beat the hours I am waiting until the clock stops ticking until that moment the door opens and I am finished oh how it reminds me of the time we spent together and wasted the money the laughter the repressed frustrations it’s funny what time can bring ( Read more... )

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anonymous July 1 2005, 21:06:43 UTC

you're a mad poster

loathsomelove

creekstersheart July 1 2005, 21:07:02 UTC

Ha ha, I'm not quite sure what that means
could be taken so many ways...

anonymous July 1 2005, 21:20:56 UTC

Interesting. Not sure if it belongs on the poetry site, but as a creative piece it works. There is a strange subliminal rhythm to it... it isn't constant, but if you went in and edited a bit it could make for a great "coffee house" poem. You know those ones with the congas and the snappy fingers and all that? I kinda liked it. Good show.

yossarian05

creekstersheart July 1 2005, 21:22:52 UTC

Thanks :) It's very different from what I normally write, but I still wanted to post it. I figure there's a poetic side to just about everything, so... why not ;)

tbone5 July 2 2005, 14:48:44 UTC

I think your real good!

anonymous July 2 2005, 15:13:54 UTC

You could probably chop it up and make it more poetic, but I like it the way it is. The constant stream just seems to fit, especially with the subject.

enril29a

anonymous July 2 2005, 15:14:20 UTC

Really enjoyed reading this.

czar747400