A Moment Before Sleep

[thecricket]

I haven't been writing much lately, but I wanted to work on some of the pieces I've left unattended for a while, so I asked for some prompts to get me warmed up. romanceguru gave me the prompt of "sleeping bag" to work with and while I originally intended this to be a funny/smutty fic about River and Jayne trying to have sex in too small of a space, it turned

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[gehdra]

Aww! This is really nice ^^ Though what would Mal say if he comes off his watch and finds that sight in his tent? *giggles* I'm sure River will wake herself up before she is turned back into a girl in rags, though ;)

Gooey fluff is just as nice as smut!

[thecricket]

Hopefully it would be too dark for Mal to see anything other than the vague outline of Jayne's sleepingbag, though I can just imagine his reaction if he saw them:

"What ya do on your own time makes no nevermind to me, but if ya bring it into my tent and expect me to sleep next to you two doing god knows what, you've got another thing coming!" *kicks Jayne in the ribs* "Now get your girl back to her own tent or you'll be walking back to Serenity!"

hehe! :)

[crazywriterchic]

d'aw!

[thecricket]

Told ya it was full o' sap :)

[fabledfigment]

I am personally very much in favor of gooey.

[thecricket]

River and Jayne don't seem like they'd be a very gooey couple, but when you get them alone and with enough incentive to share their feelings, they turn into little tufts of fluff :)

[anonymous]

its perfectly sweet and gooey the way a just baked chocolate chip cookie half melting in your hands is.
err. if you know what i mean.
basically its wonderful.

[thecricket]

Mmm, chocolate chip cookies... *drool*

Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed the gooey-ness :)

[romanceguru]

I originally intended this to be a funny/smutty fic about River and Jayne trying to have sex in too small of a space.

That sounded fun (and hilarious), but I LOVE this. You make their relationship feel seemly and natural without making the characters OC or too sappy. The best thing about your fic is your ability to place the reader in the moment with your beautiful descriptions.

I hope this helped warm you up some, ‘cause I’m ready for more!

[thecricket]

The funny/smutty part was the first thing I thought of when you gave me the prompt, but you know how it is when you start to write and it just comes out completely different than you intended :)

Thank you so much! It's hard to get started, but once words start trickling out things start to flow easier. I feel like a rusty water pump ;)

The next prompt you gave me will be a little more of a challenge. "Tribal dance" just makes me think of Jayne in a loin cloth dancing around a big fire...which is actually a lovely mental image, though not exactly conducive to writing :)