I think consistency for all your girls as a whole is something you should still be working on. I know you got that criticism in the last meme from an anon but I still don't feel like your characters match their applications in some places but there are problems in the personality sections of the apps anyway because they feel like they're not so solid either. I know characters have multiple traits so they don't feel flat and static and that in different situations, different character traits emerge. But in the case of your girls, it just goes too far beyond that.
For example, with Krypta, it says that she has serious moments and I think you should try to bring those out because she spends a lot of time mucking about and trolling which is fine because it does say that she's an average girl and such but if/when she is having a very serious moment, it might not feel wholly believable or far too much like mood whiplash
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There's also a lot of trauma as a backstory to varying degrees and while pretty much every character has bad things happen to them, when it's all three of them, it seems like a cop out. Characters can have lives with bad things happening to them but things don't have to totally focus on the trauma of what has happened to them and that's the vibe I get and it doesn't help when (and probably picking things from plurk isn't the best thing because I know we joke around and stuff there) when you often go LOL TRAUMA in response to anything with your characters/situations and conversations that might come up. Obviously with the three girls in the game you can't suddenly start changing their canons but maybe a tip for the future. There's a lot to be careful with when you're playing an OC and OFCs have to toe a finer line because of the amount of Sue issues and accusations that are slung their way.
And finally (I apologise for the length here) when it comes to dropping threads, I really think that's an issue you have to address. You're
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For example, with Krypta, it says that she has serious moments and I think you should try to bring those out because she spends a lot of time mucking about and trolling which is fine because it does say that she's an average girl and such but if/when she is having a very serious moment, it might not feel wholly believable or far too much like mood whiplash ( ... )
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