01: Comfort

[phoenix_zeal]

Title: Comfort
Author: phoenix_zeal
Pairing: Sherlock/John
Rating: PG-13
Genre: Fluff, Angst
Disclaimer: I do not make any profit from this.
Beta: Me, Myself and I
Word count: 1353
Summary: This dream isn’t like the usual ones. John is usually less stupid, more eloquent. Or he just screams while he watches Sherlock fall over and over again.
Warnings:

Comments

[mirokkuma]

OK, HERE I AM. HERE WITH MY FLAIL. SO MUCH TO FLAIL ABOUT ASJDKNSD.
So firstly, all over characterisation ♥ WONDERFUL. I love the tone this is written in and your word choices that give away how both of them think and feel, and like I already said, I loooove the accuracy of the dialogue.

I love how gentle and careful Sherlock is with John and his feelings yet still has that little 'ugh -_-' side to him.
Perhaps it’s only the dark playing tricks on John’s mind - with a bit more illumination the sadness would be gone. ;___;

From previous conversations we've had I was surprised when sex started to be involved in this, but I think you've captured their relationship and how they'd deal with attraction and possibly wanting eachother so well.
“I wouldn’t laugh,” Sherlock says after a moment of silence. “Sneered perhaps, or said something rude, but I wouldn’t have laughed.” PERFECTION RIGHT HERE <333 and aksjnd Sherlock, using words like physical proximity and somehow sounding so adorable and cuddly while doing so.

“This is the least

[phoenix_zeal]

OMG, YOU WEREN'T LYING ABOUT THE FLAIL. OH GOD, YOU'RE MAKING ME CRY. IDFHGODHGD ♥ Gah, I thought my characterisation was total fail and here you are, praising it. So much happy feels are had right now. ;__; This is the way they behave in my dream verse (the different dream scenarios I envision before going to sleep) so I'm really glad that it worked for you, also the tone and word choices. :D