Integrated Essay

[crittle_meistah]

This is a paper I'm writing for my English class. It's still in revision, so I figured I would post it here and hopefully some of you will feel compelled to read it and give me some suggestions/compliments/criticisms.

Comments

[suicide_perfect]

What is your e-mail? I edited it using highlighting and stuff, I don't want to do all the HTML. If I could e-mail it to you it would be better. (Of course you don't need to if you don't want.)

All my editing is suggestions. Feel no obligation to care. (I'm still just in high school, you know, but I have some mad skill at writing. Or so I am told)

<3
Kat

[crittle_meistah]

It's Malicelevy@yahoo.com

I also used to be told that...people don't tell you nice things like that after high school.

[nyxylf]

hey, i found this to be quite interesting. I found a few things that you might want to correct or elaborate upon, but altogether, this is really well done. I'll talk to you about it after you get out of class.

[anonymous]

The main thing I would edit would be the first sentence, turning my gandmother on my dads side, to my fathers mother said to him upon his announcement...

I don't know why but the grandmothers on my fathers side was just a hitch.