Help my Personal Statement!
Hey, everyone! Below is the current version of my personal statement. Please, please, please, take a few minutes to read it and give me feedback. If you see any errors or if you think something sounds funny, please leave a comment! (It's short, by the way--less than one page long) Thanks for your help!
I started in the theatre while in high ( Read more... )
I started in the theatre while in high ( Read more... )
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In addition to practicing empathy, the group serves as an important outlet from the stress of school.
You go into present tense here. You might want to write "served" unless you're still running the acting group. In which case, I suggest changing "took" to "take" in the next sentence.
My brief flirtation with emergency medicine ended when I realized how much I enjoyed seeing returning patients at the student-run clinic. I like walking into a room having already established a rapport with the patient and following up on the previous visit. Being a director at the clinic helped clarify what I wanted from my career.
You might want to change the second sentence to read "liked" instead of "like" because the first and third sentences are in past tense.
Medicine requires passion and determination to be successful, and family medicine is the perfect match for my interests and goalsJust add a comma before the "and ( ... )
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