Misplaced Rage

[ct_hol]

“Whoosh” as the swords blade barely misses my shoulder as I spin away from her attack.

I push against the air between us and force myself round to face her head on.

I will win, there is no maybe or default or re-match, this is it.

She is angry, she thought it would be easy contest and that I was not an equal to her, what she forgot is that I am

Comments

[quill_quirks]

This was nicely done and it is true that one who fights in anger typically looses. *Applause*

Thank you

[ct_hol]

Hi

Thank you very much for reading and your kind words. ;-)
*courtesy*

Thank you

[ct_hol]

Thank you very much for taking the time to read. ;-)

[der_verstand]

I like the central character; she has an aura of determination and skill. I also enjoyed the fact that even though she was the 'Chosen one', she still had a weakness, which was refreshing.

The action in this is written well too. It was good how you were able to convey the mind process of the character whilst also keeping the action upbeat and keeping your writing descriptive. :)

Thank you

[ct_hol]

That was really good crit!
Exactly wanted I wanted to come across when I write the piece.

Glad you enjoyed it.